Black Haiku : moving a lil fast

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Our last goodbye
    seems a little too close
    to the new missus hello
     
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    Getting Close, and Intimate
    Expecting many Things
    Afraid if they Start They won't Last
     
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    This reads like a great PSA for those of us who enter new relationships before fully, physically or emotionally exiting the old. Though a situation could be heart-hurting in the moment, this piece has a certain calmness to it. Almost like saying it rendered release. I really like it!

    Great haiku!


    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    Her last goodbye
    seems a little too close
    to my arrival
     
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    Goodbye beloved was
    too soon before we became
    sweet hello's today
     
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