Black Poetry : ...Movin' On...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Aug 18, 2005.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this poem has a long story behind it...but the bottom line is when u have somebody that'll love you, dont mess it up...


    i don't know why you've
    came in my life to
    show what it's like to
    be on the other side and i

    force myself over you
    move on in spite of you
    taunts me inside to
    admit i'm changed cuz of you

    go on and love her
    tell me its over

    Lord knows i'm hurting so bad...

    she's taken my place
    but i've got God's grace

    Lord knows my heart aches so bad...

    the one that once beat for you
    the one i once gave to you

    i wish i hadn't but i did
    ain't never felt a pain like this
    so i just cry every pain out
    and remove all my pain and doubt...
     
  2. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    DANG FEELING YOUR PAIN POET, AND I KNOW PAIN VERY WELL
    BUT YOU LIVE AND LEARN THINGS HAPPEN FOR A REASON AND YOU BE ALRIGHT TRUST ME, BECAUSE LIKE THEY TOLD ME, THOUGH IT FEELS LIKE IT,

    -----IT'S NOT THE END OF THE WORLD

    PEACE POET

    DSS
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deeply felt and the pain it stain to da heart ....wow!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt the pain in this piece, but no one can really take your place even though it may feel like it. Moving flow.
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

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    thanks for the comments everybody...i really tried to convey my pain through this piece...
     
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    re:Moving On

    I can visualize this poem and your pain. Excellent.
     
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