Black Poetry : Morning After

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  1. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ok, peeps, I wrote this after a eventful Wednesday night, hope it makes sense, especially with all the talking lines.


    Morning After
    "I don't know if we should, don't know if it's right."
    Am I mean to feel guilty about what happened last night?
    "Come on baby, come inside, I promise you wont regret."
    Now the memory lingers, your kiss I'll never forget,
    "OK, but not for long, I really cannot stay."
    Once inside you brought me bliss and kissed the night away,
    "All I want is to please you babe, to make things right for you."
    Am I meant to feel cheap and dirty about liking what you do?
    "I don't even know you, just know I'm not like this."
    I didn't sleep with him, he's notanother number on a list,
    "You're the first girl I've brought home, besides you know my name."
    After spending a night with Ben, I'll never be the same,
    "Alright i'll see you later, I felt my number in your phone."
    Then I climbed back in my car and drove home alone.


    15/3/02
    *Emma*
     
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    Morning After
    "I don't know if we should, don't know if it's right."
    Am I meant to feel guilty about what happened last night?
    "Come on baby, come inside, I promise you wont regret."
    Now the memory lingers, your kiss I'll never forget,
    "OK, but not for long, I really cannot stay."
    Once inside you brought me bliss and kissed the night away,
    "All I want is to please you babe, to make things right for you."
    Am I meant to feel cheap and dirty about liking what you do?
    "I don't even know you, just know I'm not like this."
    I didn't sleep with him, he's not another number on a list,
    "You're the first girl I've brought home, besides you know my name."
    After spending a night with Ben, I'll never be the same,
    "Alright i'll see you later, I left my number in your phone."
    Then I climbed back in my car and drove home alone.


    OK fixed it :)
     
  3. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow

    this deserves a sequel.
    dialogue is tyte.

    i dig it,
    j.
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Emma.


    (listen to my big sister Sherrie. SOMEtimes she
    be knowin' what she talkin' about! LOL )

    now! about the piece... i really enjoyed the read!
    it was personal & i also like the use of dialogue.
    keep up the good work my dear!! :)

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks guys

    Thanks heaps for your support, I'm glad you all liked it.

    J'hiah, don't worry a sequal will be coming, since that poem was about what happened Wednesday night, I'll write about what happened on Friday night. Look out for part 2 :)

    Sherykah, I'm really glad you understood the way I wrote it with all the dialogue and stuff. The reason I "fixed" it was because after I posted it I noticed some typos.

    Sunshyne, always good to see you reading my work, girl, I love your visits. Thanks for your comments.

    Well I guess I'll start work on Part 2 :)

    *Emma*
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis capture me all da way now i'm staying for pt.#2
    of dis blissful duo
     
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    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks rich, glad to see ya here.
     
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