Black Poetry : More than friends

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  1. cattalina

    cattalina Active Member MEMBER

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    I'm not really into love poems but this is about my best friend...*sigh*

    From watching cartoons in fruit of the looms
    to sharing words on the same stage
    words on a page
    it was more than that
    but she didn't understand
    just wanted you to be her man
    the words you said
    not from the page you read
    but from the heart they bled
    still she didn't get it
    so she never felt connected
    just blamed me for why she felt disconnected
    we were just friends
    going through life's phases and trends
    giving advice on everything and anything
    boyfriends and girlfriends
    and so many other things
    we were just friends
    you tried to let her in
    creating a map drawn by words to guide her beyond the surface; the core of your soul within
    but the words were foreign
    she didn't comprehend
    and concluded the problem was me your friend
    and told me if my motives were really to see you happy
    I would leave
    so I did sadly
    always remembering simpler days
    of two young kids watching cartoons in fruit of the looms
    now here we are again sharing a stage
    like it was yesterday
    giving back rubs and hand massages
    funny how now
    I remember all those moments
    we came so close to being more than friends
    when will we have the courage to see
    that somehow we evolved
    no longer are we just friends...
     
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    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tyte poem.........keep ya head up.much love :)
     
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    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    nice scribe...i like how you used the third person
    in this piece...
    peace
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well written
    u express it so well with the third eye
    keep flowin'
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautiful flow such passion in your work nice piece peace and blessins keep flowin
     
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    wow nice flow much luv
     
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    Best friends evolving to lovers? What a beautiful pair. nice scribe!
     
  8. cattalina

    cattalina Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks guys...however we still are just friends...I don't really know what's up...we just dance around the topic...maybe it's weird to go from best friends and calling each other sister and brother to boyfriend and girlfriend. :( But thank y'all for listening!
     
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    No! It's not Weird. I would think that a best friend could be the perfect lover. Someone who knows all about you even the flaws and still love being with you.
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a very well written poem......good job!
     
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