Black Poetry : Moments

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by smoothsoul, Oct 23, 2006.

  1. smoothsoul

    smoothsoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ok, I'm a newbie, but here we go....................


    After we shared the moments
    that no one called ours
    we left with ourselves unseperated

    Yet moments bring sadness
    and lovers die quickly
    as we often said

    Remembered are the joys, the seldom tears
    the madness of us
    through all the unrehearsed discussions

    And we'd feel beauty
    grabbing at each other
    sadly, separately and in vain
    for something somewhere else

    We knocked down the doors
    and broke most windows to our souls
    and there we lay high in basements
    or our families beds
    for second conscious

    and there we left
    with madness closer than our love
    with a deeper search for the only sun
     
  2. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Smoothe, welcome to the community. We are very happy to have you here.

    As for your write...

    It was real. You've written this one based on experience, yes?

    This felt sad to me, perhaps based on what I am going through right now.

    Big up for this write, it was indeed Smoothe ;) Last part was profound!

    Keep it up! Like your flow.

    One.

    ~Ikoro
     
  3. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm an oldie and I liked it--keep them coming--Amun-Ra
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome smoothsoul

    :new: welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the new home u found
    welcome from above as i bless this with love .


    tyte joint love the way u express it well
    madness closer then love can run deep.

    again welcome within the family enjoy relax and flow
    give love as love is given...:wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  5. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome smoothsoul.
    I love this.
    I'm all gaa-gaa over this one.
    :hearts4: :hearts4: :hearts4:
     
  6. smoothsoul

    smoothsoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks

    Thanks so much for the warm welcome and feedback. It is an honor to be among so many gifted souls. May Peace always be among you and yours.
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes moments do flash by in our minds this way, melancholy piece, well posed. Welcome to Destee's.
     
  8. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yea

    so when does it stand now?

    you have some memories to tap into here

    was it good
    was it bad

    sounds like it was good though

    and welcome to Destee's poet

    peace
     
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