Black Poetry : Moment Taken

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  1. Khai Tau

    Khai Tau Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Moment Taken

    The best of humanity abound to see, personified perfectly in you and me
    in he and she

    in them and they
    with the ways of love and compassion encompassin all in similar fashion
    To wat your askin

    Theres beauty amongst the evil, beauty in the good,
    beauty in when it wont stop raining and you wish that it would
    know that you could

    jus Walk outside, as the rain falls and slides down your face
    til your smile spreads wide, cuz its been too long since last time
    you've played in the rain

    or enjoyed the allure of a moment for whence it came
    must be insane for a brain to not taste the sweetness of the sugar cane
    ...that is nature
    that is life

    That is the moment of riding a bike or taking a hike
    or beholding the Pyramids in your sight....
    the moment in the making
    aint no moment of fakin
    the moment in the making
    aint no moment worth hatin
    the moment in the making
    aint no moment of waiting
    no...nah...
    the moment in the making..
    is a moment taken

    -Vebratim
     
  2. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man, you broke it down and laid it out!!!! I am completely in awe!!!! Thats why you the WINNER! LOL!!!!
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yes brethren

    you hit the core with this one

    peace
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow ...okay, that's what's up!!
    So allow me the moment to inhale the moments it took you to share these special, yet important moments that counts.
    Nice drop poet!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow u struck it on hit here
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really appreciate the way you posed the ins and outs of each moment, as well as the pace of this piece. Much enjoyed poet.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Verbatim
    Very awesome flow
    Yes I do believe in the moments
    and taking the time to feel it all
    wonderful insight.
    Keep bringing it

    Peace~N~Love
     
  8. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :insane: ALL OF THIS RIGHTNESS!
    I really needed to read this.....
    I just got in from a very long day....that has only just begun(future wise)
    and I am tired...
    That "TOOK' ME!!!
    This was a captivating poem:D
    All about specialty!!!!!
    Great Verbatim
    Flow On!!!
    *Snaps*


    :10200:
     
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