Black Poetry : Mo Betta Passion (Response to Sha'iyn's "Good Lovin")

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  1. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sex is great but, I want some mo betta passion
    Lookin deep into my eyes and givin it to me in rations
    Starting with my feet, savoring each toe one by one
    Caressing my ankles with delight until all the work is done

    My mind is your foreplayground as you work your way on up
    I’m feeling your vibe, feelin your flow, cause you seem to know what’s up

    You read my mind
    when you palm me from behind
    My thighs are on fire
    as your tongue trails my liquid desire

    Taking me places where no man has ever gone
    Come on home to me baby ‘cause this is where you belong
    From the way you lovin me…I can really tell
    That you know exactly what you doing, cause you
    Doin it
    And doin it
    And doin it well!

    From the look on your face I can tell you got this on lock
    Pleasing me like a real woman and not some Jenny from the block
    I’m amazed at your appetite
    You devour my forbidden fruit like a King in your own rite

    I can’t believe how well you’re taking care of me
    Time seems to stand still as you spread apart my knees
    Never taking your eyes off mine while guiding yourself inside
    I decide to buckle up cause this is sure to be a bumpy ride

    Slow and easy is the way you please me
    I’m the luckiest woman in the world cause this is better than a shopping spree
    The room starts spinning and I think I hear sounds from the Georgia Mass Choir
    As the rhythm of your lovemakin’ takes me
    Higher
    Higher
    Higher

    Caressing my breasts as you rock me from side to side
    The waters become treacherous as the ship begins to collide
    Reaching the top of Pikes Peak I declare with a scream unsurpassed
    Thank God Almighty I’m free, free, free at last!​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    O' my ! now dat's good lovin from da top to da bottom
     
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    This was fun loving and passionate at the same time. The fellas will want to explore these options in depth, lol. Well written piece from start to finish.
     
  4. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Rich and Sis Watz! Fun can't get any better than this...LOL!
     
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    whew!

    what passion and wordplay!!! and what you know about Pikes Peak. sounds like a climatic synonym. good job. good details. liquid desire, huh? major turn-on. your man has some work to do. i hear you black woman, claim that sensuality. whew!!! hot!
     
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    well done poet I was really feelin this
    flow on!
     
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    Hi HopelisRomantic
    So true sis, it's that passion that set the motion
    for that great you know what..lol
    Nice one Sis
    Keep it coming

    Peace~N~Love
     
  8. LovesDestiny

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    Sha'iyn: Well, you started it! But coming from you I'm definitely honored!

    Sassysammy: Thank you for the love!

    Bluewater: You are so right about that passion...sets the stage for some great things. A little bit goes a long way! Thank you my sistah!
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    do me a favor please?

    SAY IT LOUDER!


    i love this piece man
     
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