Black Poetry : ...mistakenly...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Jan 11, 2006.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my body
    weak

    mistakes ive made they won’t leave
    i forget and they come back calling me
    on the outside looking in im just fine
    but if only you knew the nights I cried

    on my
    knees

    soaked pillow drenched with my tears
    a tear for every mistake over the years
    only God truly knows and feels my pain
    He was there when i could only cry his name

    i cried
    “God please…”

    Mistakes haunt me and taunt my dreams
    Don’t wanna go back to the torn heart seams
    My heart was hurting and my soul it bled
    But all God wanted me to do was forget regrets


    He answered
    and came to me…
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i feel you , and the power of he.....
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel you on this cause right now I am going through the same thing. My girlffiend and I split up on New Years Eve. And right now at this point of time I miss her like crazy but keep your head up and keep you foces
     
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    Yes sista, the glory of what got can do. I've been to that place much more than I'd like, but he keeps reviving me.
     
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    i love the way you did the title
    I loved the way you did the stanzas
    I loved the way you did the format
    you did a fantastic job
    I loved how the words flowed

    this was royally done

    Peace

    Patrice
     
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    The Lord Answered
    He came to you see
    He is in your heart
    Meaningful to me
    He is your spirit
    Its so plain too see
    Beauty is the treasure
    Life is so complete
    Blessed us with your presence
    The world can see
    Eye of the beholder
    Lord knows
    You cant be defeat
    We all mistakes
    We all shed a tear
    We all have a fear
    We all need you near
    I really need you here
    He answered
    you came to me…
     
  7. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes i like what you've done with this flow flow on poet.
     
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    soblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes this is a great poem... Flow on poet....
     
  9. bigdrizzle

    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "Mistakes haunt me and taunt my dreams
    Don’t wanna go back to the torn heart seams
    My heart was hurting and my soul it bled"



    These lines stirred up something inside of "I"...know this feeling all too well...Great piece...


    Drizz
     
  10. ibrahim

    ibrahim Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa...
    love it.