Quiet Poetry Lounge : MISSING YOU

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Beautiful_by_me, May 29, 2004.

  1. Beautiful_by_me

    Beautiful_by_me Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can you feel,
    This lump in my chest.
    The tightness of my throat as I try to swallow?

    Can you feel,
    The stinging of my eyes As I

    try - not - to - blink
    Tears?

    I’m Missing you…

    Can you feel the heartbeat beneath the arch of my covered sacredness?
    Can you feel the tingle beneath my feet, at the center of my arch, finding it’s way to the very first rise at the tip top of my spine?
    ****, I’m Missing you…
    Can you feel my body tense, muscles lock, my eyes roll back inside my head. Eyelids beginning to flutter as I try to hold on to every memory of what?
    Every memory of this, and that.
    Every memory of… you…

    Can you feel every breath that I take, filling my lungs with enough air to exhale a song in your name…giving in to the rhythm? Which gives way to a nod…that in turn sends a beat to my heart, that quickens my legs, to move my feet, swaying my body,……… and oops there goes my…
    **** can you feel that?
    It’s a sad shame that you are so far away. And I’m missing you.
    Can you feel that? ©
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You're as one even when the other is away, in heart, but that doesn't mean you dont miss him dearly. Emotional piece.
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh, I know how this feels, and you articulated it so well. Very very nice.
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed i know this all so well
    da feelings and all
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you posed this well
    i so know this feeling
    flow on nice write indeed
     
  6. Bluewater

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    yes i can indeed
    feel that missing feeling
    deep flow
    in your poem
    wonderful drop
    keep the flow coming
    Peace~N~Love
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  7. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was a very heavy drop, how can he not feel it?...he may be somewhere feeling the same way too. nice piece.
     
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