Black Poetry : Mis-directed intent

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  1. OmoObatala

    OmoObatala Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    forgive me for I have sinned
    with words
    I took words
    of lust and did things
    with them and turn
    them around
    and then placed them in places
    they should not have been, forgive me for
    the intent was to make your sudden death last for
    hours on hours and at wits end...
    I wanted you to feel me
    and feel what I can do
    to you with out touching you.
    I guess I am not as wise or on
    the same level as the rest,
    some how I guess I will
    transition manifest from this to that place
    Obi one may the force be with as I am with you now.
    only in thought

    these words are just words
    only the title can give away the content
     
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    Queen_of_Spades Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Intent Made

    Very honest flow..and great job on word play. I'm becoming quite a fan.:toast: Well done.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said u pose da truth in flow ....work dem words
     
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    exodus.


    (i'm still diggin' on that **** name!!) :)

    sometimes thoughts poetical-ly expressed
    can be just as sensual as actual touch... but
    ... this piece is evidence that you already
    know that!! :) i liked this... a lot. thanks for
    sharing.

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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