Black Poetry : MIRROR OF LIES

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  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you claim to be me,
    and i claim to be you.
    we look in the mirror,
    to find 1--not 2.
    and it's amazin',
    how our reflection is made out to be.
    the opposite of what the mind,
    wants us to see.
    but my blackness is caressed,
    by the hand of coal.
    twisted and manipulated,
    outlined to put the rhythm in the soul.
    and outdated and outcast,
    by the world and its curses.
    but i carry my pride,
    like i carry my purses.
    on my shoulder,
    cuz there's no chip there.
    and even though i ain't ballin' enough,
    to get Gucci underwear.
    somewhere under my blackness,
    is oilwells and diamonds waiting to be found.
    screaming to be noticed,
    like the neptune sound.
    and mirror oh mirror,
    you decieve that you do.
    but i know i'm me,
    and not you.
    cuz i ain't what you claim me,
    cuz you're on the outside.
    and i'm woman enough,
    to realize.
    that no matter how much you show,
    you never show what really counts.
    for all you show of me,
    is just.....................one..................ounce........
     
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    Beautiful_by_me Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "somewhere under my blackness,
    is oilwells and diamonds waiting to be found.
    screaming to be noticed,
    like the neptune sound"



    :flame: :flame: :flame: :flame: :flame: :flame: :flame: :flame:
    All I can say...is "FEVER"ya give me "FEVER"
     
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    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :flamet: :flamet: I love this piece! You can feel your pride in every line. Great flow!!!
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful_by_me thank you, your words are encouraging

    jazzymoonchild thank you, thank you, thank you, enjoy the read! :book:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling all dis speak on i like how u scribe this one
     
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    somewhere under my blackness,
    is oilwells and diamonds waiting to be found.
    screaming to be noticed,
    like the neptune sound"


    just flow on...tight drop
    peace
    Angel
     
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    thank you all, even though i may not put every name up, you are not forgotten, thank you all again.........one love
     
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    Posed with pride bursting forth. Keep them coming.
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you thank you, i mean some ppl take for granted the love that others show towards them, and i don't wanna be that kinda person, so take it to heart when i say thank you, cuz it's heart felt.......... :grouphug:
     
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    :bowdown: Oh My!...Oh My!...Oh My Goodness!!!!!! :spinn:

    You have swelled my chest this morning, LilCherry76. The metaphors in this poem are absolutely beautiful. I can't say in words much more than all the others and like all the others, this lines brought my soul to the edge of it's chair...

    somewhere under my blackness,
    is oilwells and diamonds waiting to be found.
    screaming to be noticed,
    like the neptune sound.


    Goodness...are you just 17 years old????? Please keep 'em coming. I may not catch all of them, but I know that every one that I do get to read will definitely capture me!

    ~j
     
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