Black Poetry : miraculous

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by gempis, Dec 19, 2004.

  1. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 5, 2003
    Messages:
    4,020
    Likes Received:
    32
    Occupation:
    strength coach
    Location:
    Seattle, WA
    Ratings:
    +32
    it's miraculous -
    it no longer has control
    a demon has been
    shaken loose from my soul
    vice gripped head
    arrested thoughts
    panicked reassurances
    - all lies
    the gold is not out there
    but here inside
    scratchin my love itch for so long
    that I barely have skin left
    my screams, swallowed in the wind
    now quiet like canyons
    I guess I'm somewhat like
    those women you read about in books
    after all
    finally recognized
    the craving is gone
    who am I standing in now
    I think it's me
    where am I in the journey
    I guess the path is the thing
    not the destination
    I just feel lighter right now
    and I think I like it
    it's miraculous -
    it no longer has control
    a demon has been
    shaken loose from my soul
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Yes, gempis, it's like that ease that just comes upon you, a calm within yourself that lets you know it's going to be okay. Where you can miraculously breathe, yes...This was so on point poet, well done. And I'm happy that you are in this space sis.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,977
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,177
    wow !!!!!!!!
    this shook my soul sista gempis
    i love ya pen
     
  4. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jul 2, 2003
    Messages:
    1,424
    Likes Received:
    12
    Occupation:
    student
    Location:
    da south............ATL
    Ratings:
    +12
    Now this was deep. I felt ya emotions throughtout it. It was well done. Miraculous, yeah that describes this poem also.
     
  5. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 5, 2003
    Messages:
    4,020
    Likes Received:
    32
    Occupation:
    strength coach
    Location:
    Seattle, WA
    Ratings:
    +32
    watzinaname, you always feel where I'm comin from, and that means more to me than I can say in words. Thanks for the continuous love, my sister. Back atcha.

    $$RICH$$, I think that might be the nicest thing anyone's said to me in a long long time. Thanks from the bottom of my heart. Much love to you, baby.

    krazelyricks, you know how much I respect you and your work, and those words mean a lot comin from you. Thanks, sister, and much love.
     
  6. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 30, 2003
    Messages:
    5,322
    Likes Received:
    38
    Location:
    ~The hidden library...~
    Ratings:
    +39
    Sister...
    I could just get lost inside your poetry
    your style is so "unique" and I love it beyond words
    the metaphor in this poem is so vivid
    and real...
    I particularly loved this part:

    but here inside
    scratchin my love itch for so long
    that I barely have skin left
    my screams, swallowed in the wind
    now quiet like canyons


    ...as cliche as it may sound
    ...that was deep
    When I saw your name...
    I was like a kid in a candy story
    and I couldn't wait to open this...

    Expectations Exceeded...
    Sage

    ****Encore....Encore....Encore****
     
  7. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 5, 2003
    Messages:
    4,020
    Likes Received:
    32
    Occupation:
    strength coach
    Location:
    Seattle, WA
    Ratings:
    +32
    Aww, dang. I wish I could tell you how good it made me feel to read the 'candy store' comment. You just made my week, beautiful sister. But you always do with your replies. I knew you'd understand, cause you are my kindred spirit. Thanks for droppin your love on me, Sage. It always makes me bloom.
     
  8. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jan 14, 2003
    Messages:
    6,642
    Likes Received:
    539
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    Poet
    Location:
    The Lone-Star State
    Ratings:
    +604
    As you exorcise demons, miraculously, our souls are freed.
     
  9. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Feb 9, 2001
    Messages:
    3,096
    Likes Received:
    15
    Occupation:
    youth volunteer
    Location:
    Arkansas
    Ratings:
    +17
    man.....

    I loved this piece, especially this line

    where am I in the journey
    I guess the path is the thing
    not the destination
     
  10. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 5, 2003
    Messages:
    4,020
    Likes Received:
    32
    Occupation:
    strength coach
    Location:
    Seattle, WA
    Ratings:
    +32
    You are right, 1poet. I'm gettin rid of a few demons, actually, that have held me up for a long time. This has been a difficult year. Thanks for your words.

    Nita, thank you so much, girl. You warmed my heart.
     
Loading...
Similar Threads - miraculous
  1. Archival
    Replies:
    2
    Views:
    472