Black Poetry : Minnesota Duplex

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  1. define

    define Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ill reply to cats later,


    Minnesota Duplex

    Five feet from my bedroom,
    this isn’t my home
    That eviction notice says
    this isn’t my home
    C17H21NO4 resides so
    this isn’t my home

    I witnessed how to cook up coke
    When some thought it was boiling Pepsi
    And when my mother took up dope
    Antennas and Brillo pads would fret me
    The cylinders with miniature roses
    Could only hold smoke
    And the aluminum foiled tampons
    Couldn’t keep blood warm
    And if the rainbow isn’t enuf, you
    Can’t write suicide notes with hollow pens
    The smell of burnt electrical wires
    During an informal family reunion
    Fam’s submitting to chemical substance
    “Say Uncle, why you let it make you say, ‘uncle’?”
    I think I’m loosing control…

    Five feet from my bedroom
    this isn’t my home
    And I’m all confused because
    this isn’t my home
    Who are these men who claim
    this isn’t my home

    I wouldn’t hit
    Rock bottom and stoop down to their level
    And they sold
    Rocks on the bottom level down on the stoop
    They slang like colloquial language
    Instead of riding sky high on high roads
    They take the
    lowes’ lane and lay in a crypt tonight
    Tried to be Supermen
    Without Lois Lane and the rays of Kryptonite
    Heros who weight with zeros
    But even Gangstas overdosin’…
    I’ve seen a G’ O.D. without visions of Jesus
    I’m tryin’ not to loose control…

    I can’t sleep at night because
    this isn’t my home
    Couldn’t look my mother in her eyes because
    this isn’t my home
    Had to play a villain in a comic book because
    this isn’t my home
    this isn’t my home
    this isn’t my home that I live in
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Speechless here, really. What do you say to a child when you have twisted your brain so much with drugs that you have lost everything....Just shaking my head. Showing the feeling linked to this situation through the eyes of a child, you've mastered this piece, and it touched me deeply.
    :bowdown:
     
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    deep flow on the mist of myth like an over dose
    tyte drop
     
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    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...the confusion in this piece is so prevalant. It even got me a bit mixed up. But this was so deep and full of such substance. I also, am speechless really, all i can say is, "keep Em Comin"...1
     
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    This is just unbelievable. You really took me there, in every way. Mad, mad props to you.
     
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    define Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the replies, I hit up all your poems except for Gem's, drop a link
     
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    tyte way to break tha story down, realle feeling ur wordz, this drop should b published in skools worldwide, cuz it touches souls and can send messages ina deep way.
     
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