Black Poetry : metal hugs

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  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Slipped
    Dreams dangled by metal hugs and kisses good bye
    If only I hung on to you tighter
    Held you closer to my intellect
    Capture your scent next to my faith
    If only I could hear your first cry alongside hope
    But instead I lynched your spirit
    Before you could breathe
    God's fresh air
    I muffled your breath
    Kept you hidden
    Beneath every fear and worry
    I buried you six inches deep into goodbye
    I thru you farther from grace
    Than any home run could have ever done
    Attempting to be whole without you
    Yet only forever becoming hollow
    I left you 2 die
    Before you could live
    Sucked your imagination from becoming extraordinary
    I extracted your dreams
    In order to satisfy mine
    Left you still
    Stuck between real and reality
    You were gone
    Before beginning
    And now I realize
    I missed you
    The possibility attached to your name
    The love
    We could have made
    Now I care
    Wonder what it would have been like
    If I didn't accept less as better
    And allow metal hugs to turn you away.
    I wonder how it would be
    If you lived.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow....not sure but this was mentally deep
     
  3. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u
     
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    Yes...this is deep and yet very intriguing! I like it Daroc..thanks for the post!
     
  5. Khasm13

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    yeah...been there on this one....
    u expressed this on a higher level...nice!

    one love
    khasm
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep and strong write I enjoyed this
     
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