Black Poetry : Message in a bottle

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  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    painful memories really aren't my style
    except for that every once in a while
    every night
    somewhere around midnight
    when you creep back in
    like some **** thief
    in the middle of the night
    at that time
    just between awake and asleep
    and I can't keep you from coming in~

    you see I lost the key
    to the memory bank long ago
    and like a fool
    I left it unlocked
    so now I can't stop
    what you do to me
    and my train of thought~

    I kept getting caught up
    in that same old melancholy
    state of "what if"
    but if I look at it
    realistically
    I know you and me
    are past tense
    so it doesn't make sense to me
    for you to keep hanging on
    so why aren't you already gone~

    cause I can't keep dealing
    with this control thing
    you've got going on
    between my head and you
    it's like dejavous
    over and over again~

    so do you think you
    could send me
    a message in a bottle
    so I can know why
    you keep thinking that
    painful memories are just my style~

    (c) nfn 2002
     
  2. FeLoNy

    FeLoNy Member MEMBER

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    just cut the string and let'm loose...
    may seem so simple when you say it but it's not really that easy

    nice flow...I like this right here

    "you see I lost the key
    to the memory bank long ago
    and like a fool
    I left it unlocked "
     
  3. elayne.

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    kt.


    ...that last verse!! (****) i read it over & over again
    before i made myself stop... so that i could write this
    response. :) i am feelin' this one... & i have a friend
    i need to pass it along to. thank you!!

    alwayspeace&Love,
    elayne.
     
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    1 WORD "WOW!"





    THAT ALL POET..DO YA THANG...
     
  5. k0k0

    k0k0 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice read...
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Nice....very nice.
     
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    very interesting...
     
  8. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Felony..thanks for the reply...yeah I guess the wise thing to do is just to cut em' loose...but sometimes it's harder to let go than it is to relive the memories...

    Elayne...as always, your support brings a smile to my face...I have a friend also who needs to know that solace can't be found in a bottle...just more heartbreak...

    Lurk...my thanks to you for reading and letting my peace move you..:)

    kOkO...Monetary..Blkthunder...thank you all for taking the time to read and reply..glad you enjoyed what I had to offer..

    K
     
  9. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bitter sweet and so complete!

    As usual you have touched the heart and the soul with this very deep piece, takes guts to go there and fortitude to live with.
    I been there...Thanks for sharing!
    Blessings on ya house!
    P.S. Miss ya!
     
  10. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah, aren't those painful memories a *****? I liked this.
     
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