Black Poetry : Mentalection

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Dec 20, 2003.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mental connection…
    Important I found it to be.
    In spite of inward emotional affection,
    If present is its absence then it’s empty.
    And just as how this poem grew with lines,
    I wish we could have copied it, over time.
    But as time progressed, we digressed.
    As I tried to draw closer to you, you strayed from me,
    Mentally…
    Away from the one of so many,
    Or so I could believe, conceive,
    If they saw what I first perceived in you.
    But in spite of inward affections, perceptions,
    If present is its absence then me, you, us,
    Empty….
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    speak on i feel and hear ya
     
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    Mawelulu1Luv Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Flowing Pains of Separation

    Tyte Scribe

    Write On!
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa...this was mos def a tyte flow...:)
     
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    I believe in this as well...
    the connection of minds
    must be present...for
    any part of the relationship
    to work...

    love the play on words...
     
  6. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Pure poetry at it's raw and most beautiful form!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was SO well done, I actually read it a few times...You really know how to mold your words.
     
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    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awwwww guyz............i really thank you for your words for they are the fire behind my desire to write and express myself. :thanks:

    I can feel you feelin me poetically....don't stop ;)

    Much love