Black Poetry : ...mensah by moonlight.

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  1. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i am blue in green
    this evening…
    repetitious-ly summoning
    mind-blowing metaphors
    & souldeep similes
    of things concerning
    us 2 arriving at 1…

    …did i mention that
    i'm really missing you?
    (i'm real-ly missing you.)

    you have become my
    constant muse-of-choice
    ...my over-flowing
    stream of thought
    seems to be inundating
    the pristine white pages of
    my confidential poetry
    with brown/deep/you feelings
    this evening &

    i am blue in green
    swaying with the gentle breeze
    ...viewing the moon thru the
    trees… with Miles in my ears
    & you in(side) my soul
    effortless-ly taking control
    of my heart… which…
    by the way, i should say
    …has decided to beat on-ly
    for the love of you…

    (& there ain't a **** thing i can do.)

    …is it obvious that
    i'm really missing you?
    (i'm real-ly missing you.)

    ...come home soon.

    © SunShyneOrygynals 2002, all rights reserved
     
  2. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awlll, **** gah, where he at??? sweet sunshyne...this piece is just beautiful. but you already know what i think. ryght? ryght. no one does sweet love poetry like sweet sunshyne does. and no one feeds off of love poetry like i do...smiles to you, ma dear friend.


    ~~~gentlebreezesoflov~~~
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoa !! dis one done steped out to grab somebody !!
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    slow

    wind.... slow wind....:D
     
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    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As always, you have a way with expressing the human emotion of love. It is said that a poem should pull a reader into itself, by the first four lines. If the first four lines don't grab them, neither will the poem most of the time. I loved the way the reader is pulled into this poem by these lines...

    i am blue in green
    this evening…
    repetitious-ly summoning
    mind-blowing metaphors
    & souldeep similes
    of things concerning
    us 2 arriving at 1…

    Just beautiful chile...just beautiful!
     
  6. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    alwaysthanks you guys.


    ...i'm just appreciatin' the love that ya'll show.
    cause errybody & dey mama don read this!! LOL

    *special shout outs...
    sherrie ...you are a mess!! :lol:
    sista j ...you be makin' my heart smile, chile! :)

    itsallLove, chirens. (umm hmm dats right!)

    elayne.
     
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    hmmmm......got me speechless!!
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nope...Not a **** thing you can do. Well done Poet.
     
  9. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm all up in twixt these beautiful lines....mmhmmmm..... :heart:

    alyce
     
  10. mensahpoetic

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    its nice to be the subject of such poetic beauty...

    a wonderful piece Layna (lol)...you're, by far, my favorite love poet :D