Black Poetry : ~Memphis Melody~ (my first post here)

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo this my first post here, tell me what you think

    The sounds of Memphis
    (5 gunshots)
    What a pretty melody
    No time to look back and see who's bloody carcass that be
    I've come a long way
    No more jumping on an old bed mattress filled with a crack head's pee

    The sounds of Memphis
    (4 gunshots)
    What a pretty melody
    Mary Jane gets ****ed (weed gets smoked)
    In the same areas where a children's' playground should be
    I've came a long way
    No more robbing old ladies just to eat for the day

    The sounds of Memphis
    (3 gunshots)
    What a pretty melody
    That's how many hit me
    When I was just 16
    Coughing up blood
    Wishing another hot one hit me
    In the head, taking me out of my misery
    Lovely melody
    Make love to me

    The sounds of Memphis
    (2 gunshots)
    What a pretty melody
    Blaze the weed
    And lets be ignorant of all the pain we see
    Maybe grab a few hoes on Beale Street
    That's if they don't got some fire ****
    Like Gonorrhea or some HIV
    Come take a ride with me

    The sounds of Memphis
    (1 gunshot)
    Oh ****, another bullet flies
    Oh ****, another ²²²²² dies
    What a pretty melody
    GOD O WHY?

    The sounds of Memphis
    (0 gunshots)
    What is this melody?
    Somebody go to hell!
    Quick!
    Quick!
    See did it freeze!
     
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    love how you brought this.....Memphis a place I'm very familiar with.....Welcome to the fam....make yourself at home....cookies are in the cabinet and there's some red kool-aid in the fridge.
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
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    loved the rhythm and the reality of this. WELCOME TO THE HOUSE
     
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    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...

    lovin the way you approached this...def dif!
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Nice....


    I like the way you set that up.
     
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    WELCOME!!!

    welcome! your melody sounds like the same tune in my hood... great piece.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!

    welcome upon family & friendz
    dis flow just step right in love da way u came !
    welcome from above $R:D :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
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    Welcome to da family Mind $oul:) I really like dis piece. It expresses emotion, and how livin da memphis life is. Keep up da good work:)

    Aaliyahmonet
     
  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo thanks alot i'm glad yall liked it
     
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    Welcome my brotha!

    You came deep the first flow...and there is no where to go....but up! So blow up the show and go with the flow...Welcome to the family...and by all means set your creative soul [email protected]
    "WHO WE BE"!

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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