Quiet Poetry Lounge : Memories of a lost love

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How did you get ingrained into my soul ties?
    Is what I can’t help but secretly wonder
    As we are saying our final goodbyes
    My mind takes me back yonder

    When forever still meant till the end of time
    And I love you was more then mere words
    And loving you too much was my only crime
    Before you and I had to draw our swords

    I remember when you and I first became a we
    And it seem if it was a sweet gift from above
    Like we was swimming in a heavenly sea
    Drenched in a new emotion called love

    As days flew into months, and months into years
    It seem that we were picture perfect and complete.
    We flew into each day with no worries or fears
    For we naively believe all obstacles were obsolete

    I believe that you were my knight in shining amour
    And that you would slay all the dragons for me
    And you did kill all outward threats to my honor
    But who knew my greatest threat would be thee

    Some how you got bored with completeness
    And went to go seek that which was perverse
    Faithfully for a while I joined you in the madness
    But I really wasn't raised to be that morally diverse

    So I watch this new life suck you right in
    With no idea how to save you from you
    And that was the beginning of the end
    For I refuse to stay and daily go through

    Now I know the answer to my own question
    For I can remember all the good that came before
    Before you turned down this crazy road of destruction
    And those are the memory that I'll carry forever more

    Dedicated to my lost love
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully said ...and held within the memories
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It seems as though one minute you think you can conquer the world together, and the next you are worlds apart. And what it the world happened in between? Well written piece, feeling your words poetess.
     
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    I loved how watz put it, yes, that's the nail on the head. Once you think love is indestructible, it becomes a lie and a contradition. Who can't relate to this poem? If you can't, you haven't lived yet, loved its vulnerability.
     
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    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Perfectly stated, we have all felt the pain of losing someone we truly love and not being able to let go, only hoping for the best. Tyte scribe.
     
  6. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    great point

    LIFE IS SUPPOSED TO BE LONGEVITY

    but you can't have longevity with snapshots and soundbites

    great piece man you took me there

    i felt this in my core
     
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    They can remove their love, but never our memories.
    Great write poet
     
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