Black Poetry : Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by nml26, Oct 29, 2005.

  1. nml26

    nml26 Member MEMBER

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    As I sit on the express train
    I look out the window-
    As the train slowly takes over the local
    I watch the people on the local
    Like a ghost
    I see friends laughing,
    Couples holding hands,
    Old friends exchanging familiar "hello's"
    I see life happening.
    Then I catch a glimpse of my reflection-
    Smiling.
    Life going on in that train.
    My reflection reminds me that I'm not on that train-
    I'm not in that world.
    I sit on mine...
    Alone.
    And I think to myself...
    "How ironic."
     
  2. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gotta say I'm already loving your style. I like this outsider's POV on the train.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done , ya style is tyte
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a creative way to scribe about loneliness, seeing your reflection through other's lives. I loved this piece poet.
     
  5. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AWESOME WRITE...

    I love it!
     
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    Hi nml26
    What a wonderful poem
    it's within that moment
    in your thoughts so relax
    that the reflection
    of the world from the train window
    shine back
    with a smile
    and this made me smile.

    Peace
     
  7. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    u put this together nice..i enjoyed the read


    Peace
    Angel
     
  8. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow poet.