Black Poetry : ME & U

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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    In my heart with my GOD
    I could have Experienced u
    and resisted
    but !
    ur more then an image I dream of

    U become my light which i cherish
    ur my superstition of faith
    When u look into me and see i am
    my heart dance like stars sparkling

    when u think of me am in paradise
    of quiet soulful love afloating da cosmos
    Something unleashing as my spirit
    feelin da warmth of ya tenderness
    da caressness of ya beauty
    as it speaks to me deeply

    My soul lone to hear thy voice softly
    as we share one moment of tyme
    will be what i carry to cherish in
    my sweet beloveth come share my
    WORLD !​

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    $$RICH$$...Rich, this is lovely. I love how you make the reader feel as if you are speaking directly to her. I quoted the above lines because they convey forward movement...a beginning if you will. The subject is already in love and he hasn't even heard her voice yet. All he needs to move forward is to experience that first soft smiling, "Hello" How beautiful. I felt this. Thank you for sharing it, for writing it, for feeling it.

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    yes.......to hear her is like being beside her face to face , one so lone
    thank u dearly as i await that moment / day.
     
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    "will be what i carry to cherish in
    my sweet beloveth come share my
    WORLD !"​

    You invited us straight n2 Your Big Heart!
    I do cherish your loving words:)
    Thanks for sharing!
     
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    Indeed....A heart of love that's bigger then and sea
    thank you for the love shared candeesweet