Black Poetry : maybe if, before you..

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  1. PoeticManifesta

    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i got that burning,
    not in my panties,
    but in my heart
    got ideas of death doin us part,
    Should have told u from the start,
    that you had captivated my heart,
    before the time ran out,
    before the ship sailed away,
    before your letters of love,
    before promises of a better day,
    Before you went over to that war,
    before you went to Karuik,
    before I knew that was somewhere in Iraq,
    before....
    your mother called and told me,
    that youd never be coming back,
    I should have told you before,
    Maybe,
    just maybe,
    you would have had more to live for,
    fighting to enjoy be with me,
    with for love, your life,
    fighting to make me,
    your wife.
    It was because of me that you joined,
    heart broken,
    love torn,
    but if I had knew what i didnt know then,
    perhaps over seas you would have never been,
    If only you cold hear me,
    say "i love you",
    and i could hear it back,
    my heart wouldnt be frozen still,
    waiting for my soilder,
    to come back.
     
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    Dlovely Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Keep doing your thang girl. It's hard to let go of a losed love. I know I've been there. Keep your head up.
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    loved the flow on this one flow on poet.
     
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    Beautifully written.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome drop sista u really out did yaself here...wow !! poetic
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i just had to say at first i was smiling at the part when you say
    got a burning not in my panties
    i likei t because you keep it real and not a suga coater
    keep it up much love
    Nevar!!!!!!!!!!:kiss1:
     
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    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks fam for the love, ive been don with the flu lately but.. never out of touch .. much love n blessings!:kiss1:
     
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    PoeticManifesta.....

    Girl, long time no hear.. I love the way your heart poured in this one. Excellent scribe. Kinda reminds me of that old Stevie Wonder song "These Three Words".
     
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    happy ya back i too battled the flu
    ya pen wasn't sick from this joint
    flow on and much blessing sis......
     
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    There was such pain in this, but hindsight is always 20/20. Great write.
     
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