Black Poetry : Man's Love

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  1. EbonyQueen06

    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The moment we laid eyes
    Your ebony eyes on mine,
    I knew we was inseperable.
    U wanted to love,
    And I wanted to give it 2 u.
    We were 2 of kind
    No female could have my luv like u.
    The 1st time I held u
    and soathe away your tears,
    U seem to understand,
    That I would cause u no harm.
    I gave u baths in sweet smelling waters,
    I bought u whatever u wanted,needed, or desired,
    Told u bout the future we would have togather,
    And of course I cared 4 u like no other.
    I enjoy your smile,
    Your eyes have that natural glow,
    Your toes r so small
    And I love the way u dress.
    It makes me feel that I'm doin right,
    When u're hurt I'm hurt.
    I hate seeing u cry,
    So I do everything to make u feel better
    Maybe u don't understand
    but maybe u will one day
    and I'll show u this poem
    To help u see more clearly
    But u can't read
    Ur only 4 months
    Maybe when u are 3
    Daddy will read as a bedtime story
    To show how much of a little angel u are 2 me :angel1:

    :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :angel1:
     
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    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awww,, so sweet.. and pure... i love that 1st stage of love.. :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully created love to bond da first stage ......
    very endrearing piece
     
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    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    Surprise endings are nice
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was very gentle and full of heart, and I liked the fact that we didn't quite know til the end that this was about a son. Beautiful.
     
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    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man i wish my daddy would write me sumthin like that.....it was so innocent and it was well writin keep doin wut u doin!!!! :hearts2: :welldone:
     
  7. EbonyQueen06

    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank - u all I love ur comments and support thank-u I luv u all
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was awesome and touching...the bond is wonderful
    this poem got it ^5

    Peace
    Angel
     
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