Black Poetry : Malicious Intentions

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  1. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Woe unto thee who recieves the kiss of deceit.
    Being intoxicated by the aroma that her body secretes.
    While she whispers sweet somethings in your ear
    Full of malicious intentions.
    Spending time exciting the mind
    With images of the sweetest kind.
    She's lifted on high, enticing, and fine,
    Her beauty damages the eyes.
    Serpents slither so silently,
    secretly seducing sensible soldiers
    by supplying sensations to sensitive spots.
    Offering golden chalices filled with the poison they concoct.
    Transplanting parasitic weeds in the garden
    long after the house has been vacated...
    Evacuated...
    Because of the threat of malicious intentions.
    She adores you...
    She abhors you...
    She reluctantly explores you..
    But your third eye is blind, so you can't see what's before you.
    Beware the sweet, soothing kiss of deceit.
    It can be the strongest of soldiers' defeat.
    Have the fleetest feet if you find yourself getting weak.
     
  2. sweet_journey

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    Good piece, not a nice one but a good one
     
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    "Wow"

    "Ok" PM,
    you have done it again!! this is a really nice piece I see I am going to be writing all night, your guys are so good....

    continue to flow

    :jumping: :wave: :jumping:
     
  4. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    are we talkin about strippers?
    or just run of the mill gold diggers? (lol)
     
  5. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Journey, Queen, Shaz, thanks for responding.

    Just a piece that I whipped up in an angrier mindset.
     
  6. msluciousb

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    Almost missed it! WOW!

    I wrote a little piece similar to this a while back...this one was full of passion and intensity...well written and precise, wonderful imagery...I just got such a visual with this I may have to go back and find that piece and share it with you! Peace...Scribe ya vibe!
    Blessings on Ya House!
     
  7. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    great piece

    i loved every line
     
  8. Destee

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    Positive Mindset ... i felt aaaaaaaaaaaalla this !!! Great Work!

    got me skared of her too ... danggg ...

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  9. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, fam.

    The good thing about it is, I'm not scared of round 2.

    Peace.
     
  10. Legacy21

    Legacy21 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love the language and flow of this piece. Very strong and powerful expression. You're were seething, I think? Woe unto this person that may cross your path soon.......Peace!
     
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