Black Poetry : MAKING IT WORK!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by lilcherry76, Apr 21, 2004.

  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :look: you want me to love you,
    but that's too hard to do.
    cuz life ain't all about,
    loving you.
    it's about making it,
    in this world of give and take.
    it ain't all about you,
    even if you are my soul mate.
    not every minute of every day,
    will be us together.
    and every time i look at you,
    i won't say i'll love you forever.
    i mean it's nice to know you love me,
    and i you---the same.
    but loving you is just like a job,
    or playing a game.
    and it shouldn't have to be,
    cuz love is making things work.
    no matter how bad it gets,
    no matter how much your loved ones make you hurt.
    and all the while i'm with you,
    i'm wanting to love you--like you love me.
    but your eyes are yours--and mine are mine,
    and we see differently.........
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done i like dis here flow
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop
    posed well
     
  4. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    reading this made me feel like I was talking outloud....you hit it right on the head or should I say me :spank: right in the head I'm feeling this flow .... foreal
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When we are as one...yes we see together...differently. I do feel where you're comming from.
     
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    Gotta have that
    space So I can
    be me!
    I feel ya here!
    Tyte!
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The scripture comes to mind
    How can two walk together unless they be agreed.
    When loving someone involves more giving than receiving overall
    It's plausible to think that love isn't reciprocated

    How many of us have felt like this?

    I truly feel this poem
    I love the way you crafted it
    The last lines are my favorite

    Keep scribin poet!

    PEACE AND LOVE
    TWISION
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Liked the way you posed this. You can be joined in heart, but not joined at the hip. Cleverly written.
     
  9. unfoolish1223

    unfoolish1223 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was feeling this poem a lot cuz I can relate and love is like a job and sometimes it is hard to let yourself love someone...I feel you on this
     
  10. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u for the replies, they mean so much. and to all of yawl that felt the same, it's bcuz of u, that my heart has been touched. i can't flow,
    if i don't know,
    where the love go.
    and i know where it go,
    and so i flow,
    to the family not on the low,
    but on top you know.... :spinstar:
     
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