Black Poetry : Lying Eyes

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  1. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She laid there staring at me with unseeing eyes,
    as I stood there, gun dangling from my hand,
    her eyes were still filled with lust and surprise,
    after I caught her in the arms of another man,

    I shot them down like mad dogs on the street,
    splattering their forbidden romance against the walls
    Enjoying the smell of callous cordite in my nostrils,
    while the sawed-off drowned out their mercy calls.

    Amun-Ra

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    Like Whoa!!

    ****...this some deep emotion! I can only imagine...
    Very mind provoking Piece...I can dig it!!
     
  3. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just Trippin

    Just a thought--but--well it could happen--we never know what we will do and then again--?

    Ra

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    OH...but for the games people play that force us into situations that BRANG on the underSIDE of graciousness with less logic spew than is given in normal DUE.

    THANK you.

    reminds me of another piece you did...in the not so distant past...where love went wrong.
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We Forget

    That our responses are not always reasoned or are they?

    Ra

    :cool:
     
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    Lying Eyes (from her perspective)

    He stood there, anger confusion hurt- dripping from his eyes like tears that wouldn't come
    I lay there, embraced in wickedness, wondering should I be
    brazen
    guilty
    scared
    the gun in his hand spoke a harsh understanding
    with a blast, his dying love crashed into my chest
    I felt it cold and deep, as I took my final breath


    :cool: Just my interpretation on what I might think my woman was thinking if I burst in the room with the sawed off....very powerful piece, Ra....keep scribin'

    MJ
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oooh

    I liked that--I imagine that must have been the thought--caught in the act by a man with a gun in his hand--right in the mark--Ra
     
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    that some real powerful love!
     
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    THIS WAS A DEEP PIECE SO I GOT TO DROP A LITTLE SCRIPT ON THIS

    THIS WAS A DEEP PIECE SO I GOT TO DROP A LITTLE SCRIPT ON THIS READY GO

    Got a forty four my shorty behind the door having sex
    And grabbing Kotex with another brother this is complex
    She doing him I’m booing them should be screwing me
    Fought back the thoughts they’re caught in the act I see
    Through the keyhole as she rub his **** no love on the block
    A scrub for not bringing my glock but this four four will drop
    Em leave em sore quick kick down the door heard shots
    Blood pour on the floor got a red mattress at my address
    Panties on the bedpost my head toast with anger and madness
    In pain pointed the gun at my brains as they splatter like eggs
    Scramble an alledged gamble couldn’t handle life any more pledge
    To die don’t know why hurt inside not alert to suiside oof the deep edge

    MADDRAPPER PEACE
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dat wus tyt

    You pretty much summed up the feeling--what do we do when we don't know what we gonna do?--never know, do we--Ra

    :cool:
     
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