Black Poetry : Loving You

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  1. Pyramid

    Pyramid Member MEMBER

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    Loving you was like the sound of beautiful song

    Loving you made everything right and never wrong

    Loving you was so pure and easy

    Loving you was something I wanted to share with the world

    Loving you made me warm and cozy

    Loving you let me know that dreams and hopes come true and fears go away

    But... Then
    You made me hurt so badly...

    Everything went wrong

    Nothing was pure and easy

    My dreams and hopes were crushed and my fears were played out

    The warmth and coziness turned to a bone chilling coldness

    The wonderful song was scratched

    Loving you turned out to be all wrong
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It seems unbelieveable how we can go from being so happy, to so sad, sometimes very quickly, or so it seems. I liked the way you expressed this here.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was like wow !!!!
     
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    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ah man........the detrimental side of love.......sorry ya had to experience it. But the result was a heartfelt scribe.
     
  5. Pyramid

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    Thank you all for the love.
    Peace and Blessings
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    likewise unto u as well most welcome pyramid
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I do know what you're sayin here. Very nice drop.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello :wave: and welcome,
    It's more than a pleasure to have you aboard the ship. I love your poem and needless to say, "been there, done that" ...love is so strange.
    very nice drop...keep it falling.
     
  9. Pyramid

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    Thank you Queentswana and $$Rich$$ as well as others for the warm welcome, as well as the compliments.
     
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