Black Poetry : loves sonata #1

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  1. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think of the hand in the watch
    Counting the moments of time
    When the day will appear and you
    My future shall walk in my present;

    I find myself sitting alone in my room
    As the shade dances with the summer
    Breeze and I stare aimlessly at a picture
    Of the one whom fills my heart with love;

    I close my eyes for a moment so that I
    Can imagine her here with my head in
    Her lap as she gently runs hers fingers
    Through my freshly tightened locs;

    I want to exhale and yet I fear that
    If I do then my dream shall no longer
    Appear and the one who comforts my
    Days shall disappear at dusk’s arrival;

    I wipe the tear that flows down my
    cheek and I go of the inhale that fights
    with the current running through me
    when I drag my fingers over your smile;

    and I lay back on my bed allowing the
    smile to direct me to a place of peace
    knowing that in days ahead my dream
    of life together shall finally appear;
     
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    Beautiful!!!

    Simply beautiful!!! I lovedid it!!!:p
     
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    Tite

    TIGHT TO DEF :toast: :toast: :toast:
     
  4. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the read people...
     
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    this was so melancholy beautiful!
    -7:spinstar:
     
  6. dnommo

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    thanks wildflower for the read...

    one.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!

    U WORKED DES TOO PERFECTION
    OF ITS WHOLE BEAUTY I LOVED IT........:toast:
     
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    Work it!

    Absolutely a flow using all the poetic styles and tools. It is difficult to write like this and have it say soemting that isn't maudlin, trite or just plain boring--well executed--Amun-Ra

    :toast:
     
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    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all for the read...i am sharpened today...
     
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