Quiet Poetry Lounge : Love

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by baller, Dec 12, 2009.

  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOVE

    Love

    Both precious and giving
    …A wonder to behold
    “Giddy fresh” in the beginning
    But…can quickly grow cold

    From the days of old…
    When Adam succumbed to Eve’s will
    Whom he felt would leave if his devotion did fail
    He said:

    “YES…I dare to forsake my Father’s command
    …That you might be pleased, once again, with your man”

    He did not understand
    …Could not have foreseen
    The darkness he unleashed
    Upon weaklings…and king

    Love

    Emotional bondage that binds hearts
    One to another
    Brothers
    Sisters
    Friends
    Or, lovers

    Love

    AgApE
    pHiLiA
    ErOs

    Need an anecdote
    To get out of its heart choke

    Love

    It teases and pleases the soul with its freshness
    When blessed with
    A desire to accept something less than
    The perfection we strive for
    …Would die for
    That inescapable
    Mind-distorting
    Gravimetric force
    That tears at the heart
    Holding us in its…Clutches
    Even after we’ve grown apart

    ~ Yes…Love is eternal

    Although…
    It lessens its grip over time (Once separated)
    Still…we hate it…when we see another
    On the arm of our “one-time lover”
    And that hatred-filled black hole
    That’s left in its wake…devastates
    Coz everyone knows
    It devours ALL hope and happiness traits
    Surrounding us
    Drowning us
    In darkness and sorrow

    ~ But for tomorrow

    Love

    That inexplicable HOLE
    As bLiNd and cOlD
    As it is vIbRaNt and bOlD
    Its warmth spreads from head
    To toes
    With identifiable norms
    That tells a story of lost souls

    Love

    It can bring with it
    Stabbing PAIN
    Sapping energy

    Weak

    Cannot sleep

    Incomplete

    Delete

    Rewrite
    Using “If…Then” software
    Save…under “ALL IS FAIR”
    When “I love you” No longer exists
    And…You no longer miss
    ~ What you never had​
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    excellent piece poet, I always enjoy reading you!!
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow is think this piece was a true embodiment of all that is love and what is left when it over. As usual you wrote the wheels off of this piece right. My pen itches to flow with you but have no words to begin to express the totality of this. So all i can say is I love this.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Whew!

    This was like the "short answer" lesson on love! :toast:


    And that last stanza was so succinct, it was JOLTING!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 awesome bruh love this love splash right here u drop a bomb with this one
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awesome poem really enjoyed reading
     
  7. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SORRY FOR MY TARDINESS...

    LOVE is all we ever hope for...but less than we ever imagine...because too many of us are looking for fantasy, instead of reality. MANY THANKS for reading.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Love is the key to what we have to offer
     
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