Black Poetry : Love Unspoken

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  1. Andreattah

    Andreattah Active Member MEMBER

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    What game are we playing
    ..coz i never seem to get it right
    What song are we dancin' to?
    ..coz the feet lose the rhythm and the ear cannot feel the beat
    Our hearts no longer in synch
    ..for you held your breath
    And took my life
    Our hands always seem to touch
    Marked on both sides by unspoken promises
    Divine realization...of love unspoken

    Love interrupted...the theme you chose
    My love whispered,unguarded and true
    But you choked it...coz you were not ready to get real
    My love surrended,fell into a coma
    Coz you were not ready to save it
    Our hearts so weary and beat down
    Unquestionable supremacy of ...love unspoken

    Your cherry lips i thirst for
    Your velvelty touch i long for
    The truth is...
    This vicious circle has got me dizzy
    And I puke mad frustration of....love unspoken
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight write
    enjoyed the flow
     
  3. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    nice rhythm...like music...
    a song..very nice
     
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    very nicely done poet flow on !

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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Andreattah THIS WAS OFF THE CHAIN IT FLOWED SO SMOOTH WELL LET ME DROP THIS RIGHT THERE

    Try be clever in quote and float like and all weather boat forever
    Dang girl you boomerang my world, on the scene with cheddar
    Haven’t seen better you got this dun open with LOVE UNSPOKEN
    Look girl in my mind I change trains and there’s strange flames hoping
    For you try to rearrange my brains got a true hummer and a cucumber
    Garden starting to grow wild in the sands of my imagination this summer
    About us going groovy to the movie seeing 911 having a crazy day
    Fly and deft like MARY JAY and WYCLEF then watch a hazy play
    Written by Shakespeare
     
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    Ireadastory Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice bluesy feel to it. Loved the flow.
     
  7. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice

    Yeeeeeeeeess This was tight!
    Keep ya pen on the paper poet u have it working!
     
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    I heard that!!!!!

    Tight drop!!!!!!!
     
  9. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reply to Andreattah

    Andreattah, If frustration comes from needs not met
    Then relationships must go to banks to pay their debt
    Souls must labor with great agony and give birth to misery
    Love unspoken, Two souls start the dance of love’s butchery

    Great poem you have made
    Now go and seize a great day

    Please show me some of your love
    Today read and reply to my thread entitled:
    " Dear Alpha Male, please help me, signed the slave from torment land"
    Please tell me about my skills, tell me if their weak
    or show nuff real----------Thank You
     
  10. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a very moving peace...
    such raw emotion...
    I see everyone before me
    feels the same...be sure
    to return some of this love
    to your fellow poets...
    drop a line or two
    in support of the family :grouphug:

    Peace & Love...
    Sage
     
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