Black Poetry : Love Poem II

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  1. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love

    I mean it’s like I’m a dope fend
    The way I feel about her
    How I get when she is near me
    The way my hands sweet
    The way my heart beats
    Stronger and stronger
    Knowing that she is next to me
    And all I can say to her is Wow

    Y’all just don’t understand
    She is almost perfect
    In every shape and from
    And every time I look at her
    She is flawless to me
    It’s like she has the perfect imperfection
    And I am just yearning
    For her attention

    I know you all think I’m crazy
    And why the hell
    Is he even telling
    Us all this
    ****, I got to let it out
    Cause she did to me
    What the Queen of Sheba
    Did to Solomon

    I got it bad and I know it
    But I ain’t scared
    To tell her that
    I love her
    Because to do other wise
    Would be stupid
    Cause a love like this
    Only comes around once

    And to be honest
    I don’t even give ****
    What she did in the past
    She could have been
    Selling her *** for $20
    Sucking **** for just 5
    Laying up with
    Every man in this room

    And yet I still
    Would not care
    Cause she to me
    Is the epitome
    Of what it feels like
    To be utterly
    And truly
    In love
     
  2. spicybrown

    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    An unconditional love from above.

    Nice, deep scribe:spinstar:
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now that is love, sweet and pure. We all have some skeletons, but what you're doing is looking at the heart beneath.
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like the realness of the imagery in this drop. I really like your style cuz. Excellent drop. :welldone:
     
  5. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i give this five stars flo on poet.
     
  6. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks all, Dang Nevar only 5 stars on what kind of scale... LOL
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice scribe. flo on poet
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    A+ scribe this was too sweet and beautiful just unconditional
     
  9. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey papi in my book or shall i say in my head that good. i could have given you the siskel and eskel report two thumbs up.:kiss:
     
  10. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aight I got you. Thanks all for the love. Maybe one day I'll find that person I wrote about but for right now. All I got is my imagenation and my thoughts.
     
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