Black Poetry : Love I lost you

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  1. Sista_Gurl

    Sista_Gurl Active Member MEMBER

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    Love i lost in my sea of storms but , i miss you.
    I miss the warmth you once gave me and now you give me coldness.
    You filled my days with laughter and now you fill my days with pain.
    I say i dont love but i yearn to love once more beause I'm empty with out you.
    I cant change but why did someone leave me beacuse I'm not the chick that dressess for other people.
    You left me beacause I'm not like the superficial materialitic people of the world but thats okay i'm doing fine.
    I miss the love that i used to have beause i felt it wa true but now i know it wasnt true it was superficial jut like him.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime we falls in da handz of false love
    and to be what we not until we take that very look
    in da mirror and see who we realy are...
    know one self ...
    whay was just ain't to be so u moved on!
     
  3. Poetic Pride

    Poetic Pride Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was nice, but here's a little pointers: make sure you use spell check and correct punctuation because although you're writing for the benefit of yourself, you're also writing for an audience. You don't want to lose that audience with too many grammatical errors.
     
  4. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    nice work

    very heartfelt piece

    keep writing

    one

    pd

    :heart:
     
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