Quiet Poetry Lounge : LOVE COME GET ME

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by soulosophy, Aug 4, 2008.

  1. soulosophy

    soulosophy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Look at me dreaming of you
    All I could hope is to have you...
    To have you walking with me
    Laughing so in love, we two
    Almost drunkenly
    I did imbibe of this
    fantasy of you and me
    Two reflective souls
    of a much larger lake
    Setting the perfect example
    of woman and man

    Was I a fool to think
    The way you looked at me
    I swear you did
    But you looked away too quick
    If words could woo
    and wooing could capture
    the wild elusive wings of song
    would I not be perched
    in your silver cage
    chirping a hymn of appreciation?

    Was I a fool... to think
    That you would take me
    As if I was yours
    Was I a fool to think at all?
    Nothing can shackle
    the surging
    emotions that erupt
    from the deepest reservoirs
    of the soul
    when a woman's heart whispers
    divine phrases

    What intentions have you for me?
    Do you wish to explore the possibilities?
    Or are your words simply to taunt
    and to tease a lonely woman
    in a strange illusory world?

    I've grown tired of love
    You are the trouble with me
    I watch you walk right by
    I smile, you do not notice me
    Treat my heart recklessly
    All you do is toss me pennies
    But the silence in me is screaming
    Love, come get me

    Soulosophy 2008 ©
     
  2. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    so heartfelt

    the love sees you there
    it cares
    but it remains aware
    to keep you from where you dare
    you have no heart to spare
    one heart to give just ain't fair
    no reason to shed a tear
    feels like a mere
    illusion a vision
    a prison a sight on
    a love collision
    divine and pure
    you know you're sure
    there is logic and a cure

    peace
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Soulosophy this was so touching, I could feel my heart sighing with each line. Love will certainly come get you, with a king who can appreciate the queen that you are.
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved the way that this was crafted and you had me hook line and sinker from the title on. And just you wait Love has heard you cry it is on its way. It will come in its appointed time and place.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    soulosophy:
    As if this piece did not have me from the beginning you had to go
    and end it like this:


    I've grown tired of love
    You are the trouble with me
    I watch you walk right by
    I smile, you do not notice me
    Treat my heart recklessly
    All you do is toss me pennies
    But the silence in me is screaming
    Love, come get me


    Talk about wheeew....touched me so...I almost cried.
    This write is ASTOUNDING.
    :bowdown::bowdown::bowdown:


    Much Luv
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    For a second i thought it was me
    my love was coming feverlishly
    I know dat love see u there
    and what ya lonely heart has bare
    for every whisper dat u speak
    truely his love opens deep
    and when time premit come to me
    forth i loveth thee .....

    Awesome write i felt all this deep in my bones
     
  7. soulosophy

    soulosophy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ya'll gon make me cry...LOL

    Thank you all for taking the time to read and comment on this lil piece :) Truly appreciatd :kiss: :bowdown::bowdown:

    Bro Street - Nuff respect and thank you for your sweet and encouraging words, that was real special. I am moved by your style of expression :heart: :)

    Sister Watinaname - Thank you and bless you for touching me with your inspirational words... I am lifted :) :heart:

    asimplepoet - Bless you sis...thank you for your kind words. Indeed, everything happens as it should :) :heart:

    4EVERLUV - Bless you sis, thank you for sharing your energy :heart: :):

    $$RICH$$ - Awww bless you bro Rich wid da dollar signs :) Thank you for your poetic artistry :) :heart:

    :hearts4:
     
  8. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just makes you wanna scream out loud "LOVE COME GET ME"!

    That was FIYA Sis Soul! Ima little late but just in time I see to receive that beautiful piece! I could almost hear the melody in your voice as you speak it openly (hint, hint)! LOL

    Thank you for sharing this awesome piece!
     
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    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As A poet i over stand that not all things written about is things felt by the writer, but what is written, is always felt,by someone, take comfort in knowing that nothing happens before time. What seems like a diss could be a blessing, and it doesn't matter how good it feels, if it's not real.

    Respect sis, everytime
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You've not grown tired of love, but of lusting...
    for love is in all that lives, in the rose you smell, the child you bare, the birds that chirp, and last but not least...
    The King that awaits you...at your appointed time.:hearts4:
    Awesome piece poet! :bowdown:
     
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