Black Poetry : Love Change - Part I

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  1. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I brought you love...
    of whispering secrets...
    my darkness turned to daylight...
    as the moon beems down upon my window pane..
    laided with dew of misty afternoon..
    bringing forth a beautiful morning.

    You gave me love as the sunset rises
    above snowy moutains...and the rain settles upon
    a teary face and an empty soul.

    You took me into your heart...your soul..your mind.
    You gave it to me so willingly and like a child took it
    grabbed hold and promised to never let go.

    I loved you for i knew nothing else to do but love you.
    To nurture you and make you mine...
    to love and hold til the end of time...

    Now i'm lost...mixed with emotions....like lotions...being rubbed
    in my skin...i don't know how to begin the change.
     
  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Do ya thang gurl...

    Neak~ Neak,

    I lovedid this! Thank you for this piece of you!


    Oneluv girl!
     
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    letting go is hard...

    as strong as we think we are...proclaiming that we can STAND anything thrown at us...when love walks away, we crumble behind closed doors.

    beautiful piece.

    thanks for sharing.

    peace&Onelove
     
  4. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ummmm

    ain't nothing like a love so sweet until its gone. I still say it's better to have loved and lost than not to love at all, but you know that already.

    Thanks for the peace
     
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    girlfriend, i LOVE this flow.
    an endless question for me
    once upon a time...
    how do i make the change?
    -7
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sha,

    Good sentiments all up in this piece...

    Nice, smooth flow queen!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    Thanks!!!!

    I posted part two..my conclusion to my confusion for the day....
     
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    Revealing!

    Makes one think a bit--revealing and insightful--Amun-Ra
     
  9. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Really

    I hope it wasn't too revealing. But then again my poetry tells all. :) I'm glad you liked it. Thanks..
     
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