Black Poetry : Love/Beauti

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Mar 26, 2004.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i took refuge in those notes we passed....
    i would read through the lost pages over and over again....
    in fear that i might lose his essence in them...
    we would talk, and his voice would forever be ingrained in my brain...
    lips always had that black lineing under them...
    and his eyes would seem to peirce me...

    sometymes i would catch him looking at me...
    i would wonder what he was thinking about...
    i would wonder what if he loved me....
    Would he catch the stars in the palm of his hand,
    and offer them to me?

    or take a knife and cut my name into his chest....
    breath life and color into my soul....
    explore my world, my body,
    ponder on its condors...

    Would he love me?

    Dedicated to someone special...
    -story

    copywrite 2004, all rights reserved
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Nice Story. Very nice. Those words spoken can engrave themselves so deep. Lasting so long. You don't want to shake them loose. Those words will never be spoke to another. :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well done and said sistah indeed surely one will shine unto u to say he do.
    flow on gurl !
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nicely done
    flow on
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautifully written...
     
  6. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I second Lovely
    Beautifully written
    Reminds me of those good old days :love:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wondering about a love, would he, could he? This was deeply written and felt.
     
  8. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall, gots love fo ya...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    very beautiful flow sis
    flow on
    loving your scribes
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    Nice flow.
    I feel this piece.
    Good Job.
     
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