Black Poetry : Love @ 1st Sight

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  1. chanel_5

    chanel_5 New Member MEMBER

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    Fragmented phrases jumbled inside
    Conflict arises between heart and mind
    inscripted psalms and my feelings... they...
    they don't comply
    I started to freestyle
    but then declined
    because swift are not my rhymes,
    but twas confused and intertwined
    rehearsed reitterating lines many times I've tried
    a simple soothing smile would be the most simplest of signs
    Into your deepest thoughts I wish to pry
    just so when I spit game... It come out just right
    If I and you were us, well we'd be we so we'd coincide
    I'd barter my heart at the drop of a dime
    but only to get yours in exchange for mine

    Ms. CHanEl CHaqUita...
    I don't know what it is, but what ever it is, I know it'll sound nice :nuts:
    it's funny I feelin this way cause like...
    we just met yesterday and we didn't actually meet
    I saw you ride pass the stop light
    My friends say I sound like a fool reading way too far into my life
    My heart hasn't seen me yet, but for sure when he does it'll be... :kiss1:
    Love at first sight
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sight unseen you remain my queen, thanks for sharing. :tennis:
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I want to first welcome you to destee.com

    Thanks for sharing this heart felt piece.
     
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    The journey that a mind can take us on, when we see those possibilities. I enjoyed reading this piece. Welcome to destee, hope to read more from you.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A grand welcome to you,
    I like your entrance, keep us reading and thanks for sharing.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the new home u found
    welcome from above as i bless this some love

    mad tyte drop and what a welcome mate u laid
    coming in do continue to share and give love within
    so happy u join us poet ! flow head on !
     
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    Love this! What a way to enter the building. The last two lines got me too - hey, chanel, welcome to Destee. Please drop some more of ya poems.
     
  8. brown_N_sassy06

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    Hey the poem was awesome it was very intricate and it was just beautiful my congrats.
     
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    This love affair is intense and I'm feeling it. Thanx for sharing
     
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