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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Giovanni, Jul 8, 2003.

  1. Giovanni

    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the end of a freestyle cypher
    .....his room was hazy/ a group of 'em
    just finish'd smoking/ he lit an incense
    to chase away the smell of weed

    the red-light threw color off our bare backs
    .....we kept the TV on mute/ watch'd Japanese anime
    movin in-time to Portishead, playin through his stereo

    yooo, sonnn...you see her titties bouncin, yo?
    to da bass...i'msayin


    yeah, young...she phat to deaf forreal
    but young...she can't see my shorty tho


    my cousin's eyelid draped over his pupil
    .....floating in a bowl of red dye, his other eyeball
    closed off like a shell'd pistachio

    empty boxes of shrimp fried and plain rice
    .....chow mein and beef broccoli scatter'd on his coffee table
    like the roach and ashes in a silver basin
    by the arm of his chair

    we loung'd/ lazy as paraphernalia
    carelessly thrown on furniture/ the T.V. was a blur
    .....then blackness
     
  2. MORE

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    ummm i smell the smoke, this was tight!!!!!:toast: :toast:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte scribe u pose here
    let ya ink continue .......
     
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    This well writen account has me buzz'n... nicely done!
     
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    :toast: Under the influence of poetry and trees.........

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    hey Giovanni
    very nice
    wonderful
    Peace
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    giovanni..
    what a wonderful poem
    the imagery
    descriptions
    the high

    twas fabulous
     
  8. tUFFY

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    I can see it

    I can see it I can feel it . It is vivid, it is sharp, precise. It is real. I could picture my nephews in thier spot and it fit down to the silver basin. Keep on sharpening my imagery. It is good for me. Like vitamins. tUFFY
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    a diffrent kind of message..but a wonderful poem...and so I send it up...
     
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