Black Poetry : LOST

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thatgirl74, Dec 7, 2007.

  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I gave you my body with out question.
    Maybe I thought it would make you want
    the me that you didnt know yet.
    I guess while I layed in your arms and
    my heart starting slipping into your hands
    I thought you were giving me back in return.
    But the realization I make as I lay at night
    fighting myself because I did something so stupid.
    SOmething women have done for years and probably always will.
    Is simply this. There is nothing on my body that could make you love me.
    THe time I should have taken to let you learn the me that you would love
    forever.
    The time I should have taken to let you see how much more I am worth
    than this.
    And even though my body calls out for you with need.
    And even though the thought of you makes my heart skip.
    And even though I know you will probably never love me more than
    the love thats made in that bed.
    I cant make my heart stop loving you.
    I cant take back what I have already given.
    I lost myself to you.
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is AWESOME

    I love the way thatgirl expresses herself.
     
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    I agree with you 1poet.. she is expressing herself well.


    thatgirl74.. you have pinned out a great piece of poetry and truth here.

    SOmething women have done for years and probably always will.
    Is simply this. There is nothing on my body that could make you love me.

    The rest of this flkow is just as powerful.
     
  4. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much for the love. I am glad that I was recieved this way.
    I hope the message is recieved by one who needs it.
     
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    conflict Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very strong message. Probably transcends all races and ethnicities. :qqb015: As a male I have even made this mistake.
     
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    Wow that was a great poem. I difinetly know what you have written first hand. You have captured my feelings as I am sure so many other womens. I enjoyed reading it.
     
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    ^^ nice!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If only that were the case. I've heard that it has happened, but that scenario is definitely not the rule. Yes, you never know who will read this and take heed. Terrific write.
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If i could turn back the hands of time
    I would wait ...

    Till you knew more than my curvature
    Till you knew my whole entire signature
    Till you had a chance to see behind the mask
    Till you had a chance to complete one task
    The task of knowing me inside and out
    Till I knew my worth without any doubt
    Till I knew you were more than baggy jeans
    Maybe till even after we had exchanged rings
    Till I could see where this saga was heading
    Till I was absolutely sure you was not misleading
    Till ......

    I was feeling this piece! It made my creative juices want to join into the flow but maybe next time. Nice tyte drop with a message.
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I place you into the Lost and Found Box
    Open at the top, so that you may find yourself
    Just about right where you left it
    But uplifted
    When you call out and cry
    At once you will answer the beckon
    "I am here"

    You will stand and reunite
    Like your lost cell
    Back to place, Relieved from fright
    Now under influence of your light
    Next time you discouraged
    Claim your place
    Embrace your past
    For now you are Lost and Found

    :kiss:
     
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