Black Poetry : Lost

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by THEONE, Sep 1, 2005.

  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Its been a while since, Ive dropped, so Im trying to get it back with the freewrite!


    Hey………….Hey…..
    Yeah………You
    Can you…………….
    Will…………..you
    See the problem is
    Im lost.
    I mean……..I got questions
    With answers that don’t add up
    I got answers……..with no questions
    What the…………………….Fff…..
    HEY………HEY…….
    Yeah YOU………….
    Can you…………….
    Will ……………….you
    Please……………..
    Im lost……………….
    I see images………..
    That make me feel alone…………….
    I’m alone, but seeing images……..
    What’g going on…………
    Hey……………Hey………
    Yeah…………….You
    Can…………You
    Will you……………..
    Listen!
    I’m lost…………………
    I talk and try to rationalize
    But its seems Im by myself
    I mean, yeah Im having conversations
    But something keeps saying stop talking to yourself…………..
    HEY…………….HEY……….
    YEAH…………YOU…………
    Can…………….You
    Will……………………You
    Stay……………………..
    Wait………Wait………….
    Don’t walk away…….
    So you can’t help me
    Or is it you just refuse
    Will you stopping turning your back on me
    Im so confused………………….
    I stand here in this mirror
    Feeling like I know you
    Thinking if anyone can help me
    You’d be the one to get me through
    Didn’t expect you to turn your back
    Just because I did to you
    I thought you’d stand up for me
    Cause we were 1 not 2
    I guess in reality your like the foot
    And me the shoe………………
    I know me but cant really understand you
    Im lost in my own thoughts, I haven’t got a clue
    I realize………. Im in this world just as everyone else
    Yeah, Im lost…………………………….
    But in reality its because I don’t know myself………………………

    Lj
     
  2. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You got me thinking
    you were talking to yourself
    in the mirror there
    the way I do.... :wink:

    this was some nice freewrite

    :sand: moham
     
  3. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    don't worry you will learn yourself, but it's not out there in the world
    it's right inside of you poet

    felt your piece


    DSS
     
  4. 1poetsought

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    Questions ask of reason, WHY?

    Hurry-Up this way AGAIN, ONE

    Diggin' the feeding frenzy of truth, PEACE
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hearing the notions u will fine all da answers within
    look and speak deeper ...tyte drop
     
  6. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I dig this poem brutha

    cuz these days i feel lost too...
    but i kno to each there is only one passageway out of life's maze
    so i guess to be found is up to you.....?

    does that makes sense?
    too long there's been uneasiness
    at life's expense

    If only i could bear my reflection
    maybe my conscious would give more direction

    to the light that i kno is somewhere down the way
    until then
    im lost too
    that's all i can say....


    thanks THEONE, ur style of poetry is intriguing

    keep the flow goin

    Mz.Soull aka prizefighter
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No bigger snare can you be caught in, than to be confused about yourself. I delved into this piece and was not disappointed. Great to read you again poet.
     
  8. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, they say a man will spend a lifetime searching for knowledge and what he needs to know is right there within. I liked this one!
     
  9. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice freewrite
    I like it.
    Feel where u're coming from.
     
  10. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is beautiful,i felt this way about a week ago!
    great piece THEONE!

    luv, plain.
     
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