Black Poetry : Lost within...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MzBlkAngel, Apr 2, 2005.

  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Being in love with you
    Was my wish that came true
    See I never felt a love so true
    But my concern meant nothing
    Being punished for my love
    Why did you spoil me?
    Why did you ask for my hand?
    Why say you love me…
    But don’t know the meaning of the word

    My love came free
    Like the sunlight
    Across the moonlight sky
    With million of starz
    Sailing in the orbs
    Hitting the crest of the earth
    Blooming so free
    My love spoils you
    And held you close
    But my concern meant nothing

    My love is passionate
    A comfort you took a hold of
    Saying you…
    Need
    Want
    Love
    ….need?
    Are you true?
    My love is naïve when it comes to you
    But my concern meant nothing

    My love is hopeless
    Got lost in the wind
    Having no control
    For my love is true
    Just naive...

    My heart never been here
    And your where no one was allowed
    Now I don’t know….
    If it even means anything to you

    For my concern didn’t mean a dayum thing

    (c) 2005
    untitled life
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...I could feel the ache in these words. Hope it's just a creative flow and not true. This person sounds like they don't know what a heart is, let alone have one. Emotive piece.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Pain is love. I can feel your pain with this nice drop.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwwwwwww!!!
    dis here said so much with depth and deep inner
    feelings and the wonderment of why with love
    awesome sis wow!
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love yall
     
  6. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Again...

    <fades in>

    Excellent work, U captured the mind with your words and the heart with your feelings. Enjoyed the read and the expression.

    <fades out>
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another tyte drop sis,
    Flow on
     
  8. PurpleMoons

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    Love is filled with all kinds of twist and turns! It takes the heart on winding adventures. Sometimes it is necessary to get off and sometimes is more enlightening to hang in for the ride. The hard part is knowing which time is which.


    Very emotive drop!
     
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    peace,

    what a love it is to be able to love an outside force to that degree without loosing sight of the stronger love within one's self, which gives the bearer of that love the stregnth to love or lend love to another.

    A Love-ly scribe sista................

    peace
     
  10. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...poet....this is great

    i am quieted....

    one.
     
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