Black Poetry : Lost Jewels

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  1. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh red luscious
    How dark the luxurious drip
    That runs through my hips
    That fills the belly
    Like a pool only
    To over
    Into the sheets
    As tender meets
    Silver bullets with reddish meats
    Why doesn’t thou hit
    A woman?
    How black is the eye for an eye?
    As you last drink
    These dark drips that
    Run off my hips
    That filled your belly
    Only to over as my tender pool meets
    With silver bullets in reddish sheets
    Black eye for an eye
    These hips drip over
    With dark red luscious
    Luxurious Rubies!
     
  2. Clyde C Coger Jr

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!

    Lost Jewels





    Tha-Emissary,

    You got me on this one, break it down just a little, I thought I had it for a minute, but couldn' quite put it together.

     
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    unknown jewels in da harvest of the hips .....hummmm!
     
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    I agree this one is out there so let me break it down like James Brown. As the story goes this a woman who's giving all her passion to a man. So I'm trying to associate passion with jewels something that's precious. However, this man physically abuses her. And she is questioning her self a rhetorical question when she asks,"Why doesn't thou hit a woman?" As time goes on she comes to her senses and is done satisfying him. That's the part where I said, " As you last drink
    These dark drips that
    Run off my hips
    That filled your belly
    Only to over as my tender pool meets
    With silver bullets in reddish sheets."

    In the end of it all she winds up killing him with a silver bullet before he becomes monsterous enough to kill her. Unfortunately, neither he or she wins because she's lost her jewel or virginity to him and he's lost his jewels as well. His life in the form of rubies which is actually his blood scattered on her hips from the shot. I hope that helps brother Clyde. Preciate you too Rich for going into the Twilight Zone. Peaceout & Be Easy Bros!
     
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    Tha-Emissary,

    Whew! Brother, I actually got all that, but guess what, I wasn't about to make no comments though. I keep saying, thats what he's talking about, and I know this, but that can't be, it simple can't be. The part about hiting the woman, I got that, and the bullets too, and the death, but I couldn't believe that that is what you where telling us.

    Trust me, my mind never fools me, I know this now, for sure! And thanks to you Tha-Emissary, this is verification that God has indeed given me a great gift!

     
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    For the most part I figured it had something do with a love hate relationship
    of sorts, but I felt a little like Clyde. Not as certain though:)

    Clyde, I admire that fact that you asked for a break down, because I admit, I find it difficult to do so.

    Tha-Emissary, Thank you for expounding on this deep piece.
    Speaking from the story lover and storyteller in me, this could
    expand into an intiguing short story.

    "Lost Jewels" Excellent title!


    Be Blessed!

    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    cocobutterskyn,

    I love you too! Thanks for the compliment, sweetheart. But I'm as real as they come, ain't no shame in my game. If I don't understand something, I will ask you point blank, I'm shooting straight from the hips:) I must know the truth.

    Sorry for tooting my horn, just a Clarion Call, baby girl!

     
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    Brother Emissary
    I thought this was a good write
    and I got the virginity taken
    and the blood exchange in both ways
    but what threw me for a loop.... was the laughing smilie face before the title LOL
    I was reading and then I looked back up at the top at ---> :lol:
    and I said :?: I musta took a wrong turn somewhere lol
    good to know I aint TOO crazy ;)
     
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