Black Poetry : Lost In A State Of My Mind...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m perplexed in this inexplicable state of mind
    that I don’t contemplate is even truly mine
    nothing in my life is operating my way
    and I have a craving to loose myself and go so far astray
    my friends appear to be somewhat rapidly vanished
    I feel so equally and solely famished
    but there is still a lone, individual one
    who forces me to press steadily forward and on

    for instance, take today when I was just reflecting
    on how could I exist if my you weren’t with me as a blessing
    you’re the only being that makes me righteously happy
    the only spirit that retains me with calmness and sanity
    I feel completely hindered, restricted, and blocked off
    from all my past treasures that were once so aloft

    i’m confounded and contained by a state of my mind
    like a prison has warped me into another period in time
    truthfully I would be empty and lifeless without you
    you’re the only one that perseveres my love to remain true
    you’re the solitary true friend I feel that I have
    and true friends like you show compassion, love, and pizzazz

    i’m bewildered, uncontented, and lost in my state of mind
    but all in all I still feel safe at this same moment in time
    i’m genuinely overjoyed and grateful that you’re forever mine
    the hardships we bear could never overcome this love of mine
    cuz everyday I wake up praying and praising God for you
    I feel completely lost inside my mind,
    but that’s not so when I realize what lovin’ you can do...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautiful scribe feel ya flow
    come to da mic flow as u know
    live right here on destee www.************
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks...i would do that but i can't figure out how... :(
     
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    go to the top and click on enter voice chat let me know what happen
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok, will do...
    thanks cindy... :)
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i just wanted some more feed back on this one to see if it should go in my book too....tell me what u think!
     
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    I read your beautiful poem to my mother-in-law and her response was: "That gurl in luv, plain as the nose on your face"

    1poetsought ~
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol, awwwwwwwww thats cute. lol.....i didn't know it was that obvious :)
     
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    beautiful. i'm with 1poetsought's grandma - YOU SO IN LOVE. and that's a beautiful thang.

    now - i read it a couple of times! Crafty how you.... never really SAY it's your man/fiance....

    i could easily apply this as my love for.... poetry, spoken-word??? it coule very easily apply to the "object of your affection".

    what you think? very versitile peace.
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

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    thanks

    do you know that i never even realized that i didn't say man or fiance?....lol, thats kinda crazy...

    actually this can be applied to anything or anyone...because is a basic feelin', love and affection for something or someone that keeps you sane throughout your life...
    basically poetry, singing and my man are the only things i live for, and thats enough to keep me sane...

    hope ya understood that...its kinda off the wall...
     
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