Black Poetry : Lost Him

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Jul 21, 2005.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I've lost him...never had him
    I've lost him...gone forever
    Lost him...over five
    lost him...lost our lives
    TOGETHER
    Wanted him...thought i could get by
    Wanted him...found away to try
    But
    THEN
    It was over before it began
    OVER
    took his hat and ran
    Out of my life..out of my being
    Moved away...ruining the
    WE
    Knew that I could/would not play that game
    Knew I wanted him
    and not the taking...Wanted to give
    He wanted to take..
    He didn't know how to give

    And
    SO

    I...I...
    I've lost him...it was in my head
    Lost him...did he ever live
    Lost him over 5
    lost him
    YET
    not dead
    breathing, living, feeling...
    like I want to cry

    Lost him






    all deepy poetry (c) deepy/ncn
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If someone can't or won't give of themselves to a relationship, you can't force them. Three deepy pieces on the front page? LOL So nice to read another piece from you, good flow about the uncertainties of a relationship.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow !
    this piece took me somewhere i lost him
    u laid it out to perfection
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sister deepy you touched the Soulja's heart with this piece about a lost love. You did a good job of expressing how you felt.
     
  5. Alizentang

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    I'm feeling you poet! Great scribe, but i pose the same question as watz, did you ever really have that person, but I think that's the whole point of this scribe.

    Beautifully written. Glad to see you again, I was missin the deepy on these pages. :smooch:
     
  6. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks watz...I know 3 times...can you believe it...but they were short pieces from the past...and so..

    rich you know how i apppreciate you and your support

    Godssoulja...alrite moderator...glad to hear from and appreciate you

    Alizentang...glad you liked it..and if you note the first line says"never had him"....so...by the way wish you'd go to the How'd you get your name thread...love to hear it... thanks
     
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    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I looked but couldn't find the thread send me a link or tell me which forum it's in. Thanks
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Emotionally yours, and deep.
     
  9. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks 1poet.....
    and i see you found the thread alizentang...
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was awesome flowing....thank you sharing

    Peace
    Angel
     
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