Black Poetry : Lost between Temptation and Insecurity

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  1. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In a dream I lost you
    Somewhere
    between here and there
    in the midst of a sun drenched city
    that hid the playful steps of your feet
    upon scorched asphalt and split concrete

    you left me to flounder in a sea
    of unknown faces
    cold stares of despair
    defeat etched upon the brows
    of wandering crowds

    the outcasts
    of never discovered happiness
    raced to consume me
    accept me as a kindred spirit
    bitter jealous and envious
    pleased by our separation
    fueled by a singular desperation
    to end us

    to-get-her forever
    they rushed to transform into
    a for-get-her endeavor
    lust whispered my name
    with haunting eyes
    a soft mimic of your voice
    a disguise so clever

    words the taste of honey
    rolled slow and easy
    into my ear speaking of
    new pleasure a chaser of desire
    so elegant America’s top models
    appear lackluster and dim
    by comparison

    far off I glimpse you fading
    into the distance between
    clarity and unfamiliarity
    leaving me
    in the midst of temptation
    designed to snare me as I
    chase you through clear blue
    avenues reflecting your
    starlit smile that moves
    faster than I can run

    at the next turn
    sitting and watching
    the lazy afternoon slip
    towards the open arms of twilight
    an older woman wears your eyes
    and I look into them for
    a glimpse of your swift passing
    but they only speak of
    once upon a time
    when she was young
    so I look beyond
    and discover you
    have gone

    leaving delectable forget-me-nots
    tattooed upon my mind and heart
    to ensure I will always
    find my way home


    BCB/Legendof_1_Spirit
    2/14/05
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was tyte and deeply felt lovin your style and flava
    keep flowin
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was awesome i was all in this love your style feeling the vibe...Angel
     
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    the sixth stanza particularly captured me

    What a talent you have! All the way to the end, the depth of your thinking is reflected. Welcome back! Please drop us some mo. :jump:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Caught in the middle, aching to revisit the joy, afraid to fail at the attempt. Poet, your words flow in layers. Wonderful.
     
  6. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Group thanks...

    <fades in>

    I am honored by each and every response. I'm fighting sleep right now, so forgive me for not typing individual thanks, but I do thank everyone who read, felt, experienced this poem of mine. We are each other's inspiration, and I am inspired by the unique expressions of everyone here.

    peace&1luv

    <fades out>
     
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    Intrepid Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awesome piece of work
     
  8. Khasm13

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    see...thas what i'm talking about!!!...

    you took the reader in with this mystical tale told so well...props poet

    one love
    khasm
     
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    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!....Legendary Spirit,
    this was a beautiful piece. This is the kind of work that makes me come back to read it over and over again. And every time I know I'll discover something new!
    Beautiful!
    :heart: moham
     
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    Might our temptresses forever return the desires of our hearts.

    May the Legend continue!
     
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