Black Poetry : Loser (the Mind Freak trilogy)

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i reflected on recollections
    of U.R (Useless Relationship)
    that twisted into shapes that
    fed my brain cells.....

    u were alone
    in the shining place
    quivering under the sunlight
    that illuminated every soiled
    deed that spread across your soul....

    u were open, u could not hid
    from Gods Eyes though u tried too...
    books filled ur brain till u didn't have room,
    for reason or religon,
    the beer bottle was your drug of choice,

    u would hid ur secrets in...
    intelligent yet ignorant,
    ur soul smelled like the 10,000
    prosititutes that u indulged in to have ur fantasy's
    fullfiled....

    at work u lived in the crease between
    bosses genitals, kissin their ***, to get ahead...

    ur skull would fill with pridefull things
    lookin down at the poorman who holds
    a can of iniquities....

    slave mind lacerates your mentallity
    making u a like a baboon in a freak circus...
    Mistake is plastered to ur forehead...
    for u haven't reached enlightenment yet...
    its still lightyears away from ur views

    u were skum in between the toes
    of humanity.....

    i pitied ur embodiment...

    (c) copywrite,2004
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was all righ thad a decent flow so let me drop this right here

    Piece of writing feast exciting brains, inviting the pain
    Spark like crack remarks attack drug addicts it plain
    Corruption and destruction this is a production of cocaine
    Make fun and break some backs fakes come whack no fame
    Insult cats then duck gatts “hey don’t shoot want to maintain
    Life”! **** soon going to be a lampoon in this whack *** game
    An artistic devil on a ballistic level blessing sin and stressing men
    Lessen trend, impressing when stuff rhyme, caressing girlfriends
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The story's pen is on fire, taking hard jabs at the loser mentality. Keep the flow going.
     
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    klabarron Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    powerful!!!

    for u haven't reached enlightenment yet...
    its still lightyears away from ur views


    ****.
    still seeking
    k
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very delightful power u pose
    let it continue to flow out
    wow!! dis was the bomb !!
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall glad u liked it...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    SPIRITNORTH Banned MEMBER

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    SMH, STORY STORY STORY WHAT AM I GONNA DO WITH YOU

    YOUR WORDS SINK INTO ME LIKE SHARK TEETH

    WHEW.
     
  8. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HEEEEYYYY SISTER...come into chat and talk wit cha gurl!!!! I'm glad u enjoyed it....:heart:
    -story
     
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    SPIRITNORTH Banned MEMBER

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    sucka

    U USED to brag bout how
    the man put u on a pedestal
    and needed u to
    help run his business

    80 grand a year
    ha ha ha made u lose
    all fear
    but now from what i understand

    your the man's
    least favorite man.
    and he is considering
    firing your punk az.

    all them lunches
    and late night dope
    crunches have come
    to a minimum...

    u so dumb....

    u gotta stove u still
    light with a match
    80 grand a year huh?
    picture that with a kodak....

    u eating chicken wings
    and things
    traded in your soul
    for fake dia-mendz
    and a mercedez benz

    i still haven't seen

    ur a pore drunken soul
    completely outta control
    and im completely outdone
    with your outcome

    cuz see u braggin
    got u nuthing
    and u like to think
    u got something


    but now
    your term
    is closing.
     
  10. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol...this is tyte sis....he is a loser....to bad that there really are people like that out here....*sigh* the condition of this world today....
    :heart:
    -story
     
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