Black Poetry : Lord Why Me?

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  1. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lord, I stand before you because I just wantee to know
    Why when the sun shine its doesnt shine on me
    Or when I ask the moon for guidance it seems to ignore me
    Or why when I think I get ahead disappointments is standing over me with a shot gun
    Lord, Why Me?
    Or why is it when I go to work the man next to me just stole and he's prospering
    Im working hard just to get ahead to be put back in place
    Or why do my babies just seem to not want to listen to me
    Was I that disobedient Father that Im paying for my troubles I had given
    Lord, Why Me?
    Or Lord
    when I try to get my Mother to understand that it just aint in me to look the way she want
    She cry
    Why doesnt see that the little raven that she knew is no longer that
    But a full grown Bird ready to spread her wings as she please
    Or Lord why doesnt my Father see that the little girl he used to is no longer there
    She grew up once again to be left scared
    Daddy can you let me for once be the adult I am
    Lord, Why Me?
    Or when I get off work I have more work to do because my neighbors seems to not respect me
    Why
    Because they just vandalized my car and think its cool
    When in fact I come home and be to myself
    Why am I being punished for not associating with the likes of them
    I know Im not driving a Lexxus my poor little Toyota had all she can take
    And me like a coward have to go park far from my door just so she can stop being abused by other people hands
    Lord, Why me?
    Is it for all the mistake I made
    Is if for all the time I gave
    and couldnt give
    My Heavenly Father why is it so darn hard to live
    My soul crying
    My heartbeat is dying
    And I ask that you rescue me
    Save me
    For hell is awaiting me
    (With tears streaming down my face, face buried deep within my battered hands I say)
    Lord, Why Me?


    This is dedicated to my new mentor Defiantson I hope I done you proud. I tried so hard not to rhyme. It wasnt easy but I tried. Thanks love!!!!!!!!
     
  2. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful scribe Nevar.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was beautifully done and hit the spot Naver u did it justice
     
  4. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Disclaimer, she did this all on her self... Wow nevar you did your thing here. A little rhyme dont hurt ever now and then. But its the feeling you get when you read it that sends the message. Lord, why me.... That is a ill concept.

    Lord, why me...
    I stood there time after time
    wondering and pondering
    why me...

    Why did you forsaken me
    see I sit here with my hands folded
    knees bent on your carpet
    the alter in front of
    with the crusific above me
    and I began to pray

    I praid like I never did before
    cause I know tomorrow
    I may not be no more
    its kind of funny though
    how you made me this way
    a man full of conviction
    yet standing here with your protection

    Lord, why me...

    Why did I have to go through these doors
    my pain, I cant take no more
    so I sit here
    with a gun in one had
    and a knife in the other
    and a knuss above
    contemplayting suiced

    This cancer in my body
    is spreading double its size
    it only take 24 hours for it to grow
    and the doctor told me
    I only got 2 years for left for growth

    Oh lord, why me...

    Why do I have to suffer
    this plait you bestowed on me
    see my consious thought
    can't believe this
    and the tears in my eyes
    a filling valleys getting ready to be flooded

    so I sit here wondering
    day after day
    hoping and praying
    still with no conclusion
    and then I ponder
    oh lord, why me?

    You did your thing Nevar I just had to add to this. Its beautiful and I know mine is kind of sad, but then those are the emotions in me that I let evoke inside of me. Not all poetry has to rhyme but its the essence of the message that is important. Give it substance and make it truthful...
     
  5. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice write nevar:terrific:
     
  6. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what I tell you. They got to love this...
    Mannie
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There is so much in this that everyone can relate to, I found myself shaking my head through much of this, and yes, I did feel it for sure.
     
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    Nevar, this is a different style for you and I'm truly feeling your flo. You did you thing cuz!
     
  9. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like to say thank you to Rich
    Thank you for entering my world 4everluv
    Defiantson thanks for helping me to do better, and being honest. i think a person needs a honest person to tell ya like it is. and I appreciate that cause i didnt think i had it in me. Thanks papi!!!!!!!!1
    To cursed heart thanks baby gurl for reading me
    To watzinaname thanks for showing me some continuing support
    To asimplepoet thanks for the comment given to me
    Thankyou fam!!!!!
    :kiss: :kiss:
     
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    WOW
    This is so real and
    WOW
    You did your thing
    WOW
    Nice
     
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