Black Poetry : Loosing threads of a vulgar youth

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Luver2B, May 13, 2004.

  1. Luver2B

    Luver2B Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 11, 2004
    Messages:
    38
    Likes Received:
    0
    Ratings:
    +0
    Loosing threads of a vulgar youth

    Gradually making your way towards that cane
    Remembering laying on your sheet's stain
    Patches of youth juice oozing with much pain
    Streamlets of your dream the proof of your strain
    Wish those lips were real in the morning beam
    Could have swore to love in that bathroom’ steam
    It was nothing less than one more sweet dream
    Now I know one thing, Mother Nature’s mean
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Growing old isn't always graceful, I liked the way you put this together.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,978
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,178
    indeed point well taken this was smooth how u crafted it
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 5, 2003
    Messages:
    4,020
    Likes Received:
    32
    Occupation:
    strength coach
    Location:
    Seattle, WA
    Ratings:
    +32
    very very tight
     
Loading...