Black Poetry : Loosing My Youth

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  1. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel my life is loosing something
    Something great I’m beginning to lack
    I recall, I was told it would be coming
    Now, I can sense the initial impact

    I'm feeling it in my aching knees
    I'm feeling it in my sore lower back
    Fleeting days are bringing in grays
    In the crown which began as black

    Lights, Colors are becoming more obscure
    Crashes and thuds are less clear
    You may still see sturdiness in structure
    But, It is no longer as durable as it appears

    I put tough mileage on this vehicle
    It makes the damages more severe
    Directions I can go become more limited
    As the wheel becomes harder to steer

    It seems I'm losing vigor and passion
    All of my hills are hared to climb
    My weakness are getting stronger
    My strengths are starting to decline

    Ailments are becoming more complex
    They are becoming more difficult to define
    I’m realizing, it is simply an outcome
    Of the constant passing of time
     
  2. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As the body gets weaker with age, the mind gets stronger.

    Keep 'em comin', brother.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    even powerful
    dis was tyte
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    your imagery is incredible, paints a very real portrait on getting older
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is def..
    feeling you on this
    in real time
    nice drop
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    no doubt! i was just joking with myhusband about this not too long ago...age is a mutha!
     
  7. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It happens to all of us.... I'm glad people are feeling me
    Thanks for the reads and replies to everyone
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, feelin this, more than you know...lol. But we can age gracefully as long as our quality of life remains good.
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You'd have to be numb not to feel this! The brevity of life is a sad reality, but it also forces you to become more mindful of how to spend your time. Poems like this is why I love poetry!

    Peace and love
     
  10. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Arrghhh.. my aching back...

    Unfortunately, I can
    relate to this most
    lyrical illustration... :uhoh:
    Thanks for sharing this piece,

    Much Peace,
    Akilah :spinstar:
     
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