Black Poetry : looking for a title any suggestions?

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  1. aven

    aven Member MEMBER

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    im lost and i can't be found
    standing in a torential down pour
    drenched from heavens tears

    i lift my face to the sky to kiss
    the stars goodnight
    as the rain beats its lalabye against
    the earth

    and the pitter patter of human feet
    in expensive shoes echo their
    reply as the rest
    of humanity races for shelter

    to avoid mother nature's
    answer to a world nothing like
    the one she gave birth to

    i cry

    here lost in the middle of
    my urban jungle i shed
    my soul and release my
    fears here were my tears
    mix with those of angels on high

    here were no one can tell
    the differance between
    a tear and a rain drop
    i express what's inside and hold
    my head up high

    i stand alone on a sidewalk
    grown cold and empty and feel
    the heat of the city letting
    its pulse tutor my heart beat
    so that we're in sync

    lost in a place decidedly rougher
    then the one in which i grew
    trying to make due with less
    then i need no space to move
    no place to call my own

    in the midst of the shower
    that nature provides i hide
    and cloak myself in its aftermath
    of steam and feel free to breath,
    free to be, just free

    i stand forever lost-n-loving it

    :angel1: 's :kiss:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome from above as i bless u some love
    welcome to the family of peace & bond
    this was very very nicely done and to sound like a title of
    (HEAVEN RAIN UPON EARTHLY SOUL )
    just what i felt ...a very nice piece what ever title will not
    do justice for the words crafted here ....peace and welcome
    :heart: :spinstar: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :toast:
     
  3. aven

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    thanxs rich i appriciate the thought and i'm a fan of your work luv & blessingsto you thanks again
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :luvv:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome unto u and blessing atcha !!
    welcome to your new home
     
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    this was tyte. i likes. how bout "lost and i dont wanna be found" as a title. much love :)
     
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    welcome to destee
    nice flow and i likes
    $$RICH$$ title thought
    flow on
    welcome again
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When I read this, I sort of feel the peace in the shadow of darkness, hey that might be a catchy title....Very emotive scribe.
     
  8. aven

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    great title from every body and i appreciate the support but i really liked peace in the shadow of darkness thanks whatsinaname peace and blessings from me to all of you. :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :angel1: :huh:
     
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    Another Scribe to the Playground WELCOME!

    WELCOME,WELCOME,WELCOME!
    I so loved this poignant and and prophetic piece.
    So gooooooooooooood! of you to join us at Destee.
    This spoke volumes about the coldness in the world.
    I like Riches title, but I have one in mind also...
    "Rain Drenched Soul"
    Loved this piece very much!
    Blessings on your House! :new: Member we are glad you
    have shared your souls deepest portion, may God bless
    you immensely for your courage to share.
     
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