Poetry Critiques : Long distance love letter

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To my beloved

    Knowing you are there for me brightens my day!

    The physical space between us is hard to bear.

    But i'm confident we are truly built to outlast it all.

    Every night I wish I could hold you and kiss you

    And make sweet love until we float off to sleep

    But we both Know right now that is an impossiblity

    So the assurance of our love eases me off to dreamland

    Knowing soon I'll be looking in your eyes when I wake

    Makes me work harder to handle my daily routine

    Because i know in the end it will be me and you

    So hold on to our love till we can hold on to each other.

    And don't forget that I love you like noone has ever

    From your soulmate
     
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    im glad you hold me close in ya heart
    plz boo dont let space tear us apart
    i sleep with ya photo pent up in my sheets
    its da closest thing to u dat i have with me
    u mock my ways but if they had wut we shared
    acknowledge not laugh hatin they wouldnt dare
    although i stand firm on my own two
    i find myself staggerin without you
    i miss n yearn fa ya voice n ya soft carress
    ya scent da soft voluptuousness of ya breast
    as soon as business is done im comin home
    no ill be runnin fastr den thoughts in ya dome
    so i can shower u with hugs n kisses
    jus wanna be layed up wit da mrs:blush:
    u miss me now but i miss u more
    surprise boo open ya door:welldone:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was pose'd in sweet caress nothing need to change here.
    tyte drop
     
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    agreed, softly and simply put. Good job!!!!!
     
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